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Seasons of Life

Spring, the time of birth;
Flowers bloom and air is warm,
A new life is born.

Summer, time to grow;
At the beach and in the sun
Carefree, warm, and bright.

Fall, the time to live;
Leaves are changing, school begins
Lovers exchange vows.

Winter, time to die;
Coldness settles in the night,
Life's come to an end.

Author notes

I've always thought that the seasons of the year were like the seasons in a person's life.  I've actually written other poems about it, and done a lot of photography on the subject, but i never had written haikus about it; thanks for the oppurtunity and inspiration!
Written February 12th, 2004

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  • Ava Noire silver member
    May 28, 2005
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    I do like the concept, and it is one of those themes that when applied right never really grows cold or uninteresting. I enjoyed reading your series of Haiku on the subject.

  • TigerPony
    April 13, 2004
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    wow, this is really good! Choosing this metaphor really worked out nicely. As usual, I totally love the ending. Everything seems to come together in the last 3 lines. Oh well, this is a really great write! Good job!

  • braincake
    February 24, 2004
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    Nice work with the metaphor of life and the seasons. I think you did a good job of incorporating rhythm into your work, something that is quite difficult with haiku. However, I would be interested to see you make your haiku into more unified units. In most cases, haiku are a single image, almost like a snapshot. While your poems contain many beuatiful images, (my favourite is "Coldness settles in the night"), it would be worthwhile to make each piece about one specific image, and attempt to more fully describe that image. However, I think overall, you did a good job with these: you followed the rules and managed to create some really great images. Thanks for entering, and keep writing haiku!


  • SusanL
    February 20, 2004
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    i like this. So often you here things like a May-December romance and the like. Refering exactly to this. a persons stage in life compared to the seasons really is appropriate. Thanks for the well penned look at this, Susan

  • RealitysDream
    February 12, 2004
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    ooo I like this one a lot! The syllables are perfect and the imagery is great. Great write
    ~Sam

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