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My Heartbeat

Treacherous waters are rising above my head
Thorns wrapped around my feet

Hands tied behind my back
My love for you is strong,
But I'm feeling so weak

Hard times between us come and go,
But my heartbeat for you will never stop it's flow

Waters are rising higher,
My body is in pain

However I know after this,
There will be so much to gain

I keep going under,
Until I feel a tug

You my love,
Untie my hands and feet
While telling me things of our true love

Hard times between us come and go,
But my heartbeat for you will never stop it's flow.

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  • Nicole Hanna
    January 28
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    Thank you for entering, but not what I'm looking for at this time.


  • sideways hourglass
    January 3
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    you had some nice imagery. i think if you did that [the imagery] the entire way, then the emotions would have had some extra power and emphasis. and as a result, the poem would have been better. for what we have right here though, this was nice, and i enjoyed it. thank you for entering.