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In My Cottage

I awoke to find a wild flower
placed beside my head.
Its stem was long and slender,
the blossoms white and tender.
The pink sky of the hour
through my window bled
when I awoke to find a flower
placed beside my head.

I rose and wandered here and there
before the day was through.
The dusk would wait for me
beneath the narrow tree.
Mist hung in the sweet night air
whilst I contemplated you.
I stood beneath our willow there
before the day was through.

I stood in our bed of orchids
when your lovely face appeared.
I knew though that you were gone;
this would not last for long.
By love I was being haunted;
by an apparition so clear.
We stood in our bed of orchids
when your lovely face appeared.

"I am here, my love!" he said,
"Though I cannot stay for long.
The moon is ever-waning,
and my despair am I restraining.
Although my soul is dead,
my longing for you is strong!"
"I am here, my love!" he said,
"Though I cannot stay for long." 

My tragic spirit-love left me
with the promise of a Rose.
"I'll leave for you a flower
at the beginning of the morning hour,
And in the evening you shall see
your loving spirit that glows.
If you promise to always meet me here
where you first saw that my ghost arose."

I awoke to find a wild flower
placed beside my head.
I knew my love would greet me.
Outside the cottage he would meet me.
The pink sky of the hour
through my window bled
when I awoke to find a flower
placed beside my head.

Author notes

*Originally for a picture prompt contest.
I saw this form used in one of my friend's poems. I decided to use the form but I kind of changed it a little bit... Anyway, even though this poem's a little bumpy I admit, I hope you enjoy.

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  • Kathraina silver member
    January 3

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    What a beautiful piece. You were able to take the prompt and weave a story that made me want more. The style you wrote this in I don't think I've seen yet, but its brilliant. Wonderful job, and good luck

    ♥ Kathraina


  • MizaLePiza
    January 3

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    Wow

    I really truly enjoyed this one. The story of lost love never being truly lost....beautiful. The more people who enter, the more worried I get! Good luck.

  • Chaoticfrolic
    January 3
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    A fantastic write, I love the meter you chose. And the imagery is just beautiful ^^

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