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lighting in me and my soul

Flowers without fragrance
can't attract many on earth

Sky without stars
doesn't compete with any delight in heart

The river sans water
will not quench thirst of any living being

The eyes that can't glance you
are nothing but  just glass balls

I am just blind
without you and your grace lighting in me and my soul

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 9

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    Very beautiful comparison makes this work very effective and makes it to the point..very much logical communication is here..well done...


  • BonnieQ silver member
    January 6

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    Amen and amen!

    Beautifully penned, Purush. I especially like your choice of words, the phrasing so lyrical, and what better way to end a poem than to give credit where credit is due: our awesome Father God. Very well done.

    Love in Christ, BonnieQ


  • Denerica
    January 3

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    Without His light we cannot see...everything is dark, well thought of... I love flowers and what stars represent, fragrance and light...loved it. Blessings.


  • Katie Lazette
    January 3
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    Your poem is beautiful Purush. Without God we are blind.


    • Purush
      January 3
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      thank you

      katie!
      thank you for liking the poem

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