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Tuesday

a broken man with tethered insides
braids an old bandanna
like the sheer impossibility
would cringe beneath

the chromosomes of life's
most piteous diseases

sips on planetary visions
through an intravenous straw

and ponders on

the many mores he's missed

in sufferance then

 

with swing of scythe he stops

 

 

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  • truembrace
    January 13

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    I don't know why, but when I go to appointments in an oncology unit on Tuesday mornings, I often think about what those patients are going through as I'm there for other reasons. For some reason, I think this poem reminds me of that. I wonder if they are imagining all of those things they would or may not have as "many mores". That line in particular rings through my mind after reading this. Then, I sit thankful after Tuesday mornings in imagining how much I have less to worry about than those I just left there. It's a rather grounding experience to say the least.

    Yes, this most definitely reminds me of Tuesdays.

    I rather like this one lots. Great stuff.

    Kim

  • Anyajoellienne
    January 12
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    love this
    its like a meaning of life statement
    very bold


  • Cannonsfire
    January 9

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    I can't agree anymore than what is below, this rocks and so does your new pic C


    • sheltered
      January 9
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      yea, ok, but so ya know
      i don't even remember that pic
      and i was not playing the guitar
      but if so, badly... lol


      • Cannonsfire
        January 9
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        lol sssshhh, you aren't supposed to tell people that, let them think you're a rockstar!


  • nevadapoet
    January 8
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    this rocks...I love your talent...it's always in my face!!!
    Shelly


  • cheaphotelsign
    January 7

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    i adore this...actually made me want to cry...feel silly and emotional...this read pouring release, to me...incredible images so deftly worded...the last line kicks sweet-ass...yes, yes, you are delicious...so very good, you are...love love it


  • redbird
    January 7
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    awesome


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 7
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    Very cool!! But then, everything you write is cool


  • autarky
    January 7
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    the opening line is THE SHIT

    just so you know


    • sheltered
      January 7
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      thanks

      the funny thing is i noticed afterward
      that you were already on my favorites
      you... you... name changer person


  • parachute fog
    January 5

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    the ending lines of the first stanza were particularly strong.

    i even liked the use of tethered


  • notorious gold member
    January 5

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    You're a creative little freak. See Lane's comment for more detail.

    "like the sheer impossibility"
    I think 'that' would sound better than 'the'...otherwise, I liked that simile; it was fluid for me.

    ;
    Jessica


  • Dalaney gold member
    January 3

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    "a broken man with tethered insides
    braids an old bandanna..." You know, you come
    up with the most creative and distinct lines! Jess
    is going to dig this. I do Love, Lane

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