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and it was their protection that saved me....

fiix me....please

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Saving hollow membranes

from empty rituals.

Diving deeper into my fractured structure,

even when I step foot on holy ground.

 

                     Make a way for shards of stained glass regret

and similarities between your strong love and my weak hate.

Can I become safe here? Is that okay?

 

I don't know what comfort feels like anymore,

not after your grime embodied me and its scars

took over my mind.

 

I'm told it's safer in this forest,

where I have many places to hide.

 

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Pic Credit: http://laurazalenga.deviantart.com/art/don-t-know-108160712

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  • Umi Juvariel
    February 13
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    Interesting write and picture. Good luck in my contest.


  • Chainsaw
    January 7

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    I really like some of your imagery here, especially

    "Saving hollow membranes
    from empty rituals."

    and

    "your grime embodied me and its scars
    took over"

    I wouldn't exactly call it an abstract piece, though - you write so lucidly and in such a controlled fashion, which isn't a bad thing at all, but it doesn't have the unfamilliar, hysterical mood of an abstraction.

    It is beautiful though.


  • Shancy Fayre
    January 4
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    I really like this. The darkness of it is familiar to me.
    Thanks for entering it. Shancy.


  • Room without doors gold member
    January 4

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    Outstanding

    I liked the way you explored your thoughts and feelings in this poem which is filled with layers of meaning. The imagery is very strong thoughout and I liked the way you developed the theme. Best of luck in the contest.


  • hotchocolate gold member
    January 4

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    Excellent!

    This is deep here and I enjoyed reading this! You are such a talented writer. Good luck to you in the contest hon


  • Desire gold member
    January 4

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    Wow~

    Oh My Word this is a Powerful piece You have penned and Love the weaving of words
    especially: grime embodied me~
    Grabs and tugs at the Heartstrings
    Excellent~
    Last two lines- reminds me of the closet where the child at Heart finds to hide in- safer place to be
    from the Boogeyman

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Lady Altheia
    January 3

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    I was told you are an excellent writer. I have read some of your work before. It looks like my source was right. Thak you for sharing your poetry with me.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    January 3

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    Passionate!

    It speaks to me of abhorrence. It made me think of all the ones who dirty my innocence with their sordid ideas of what they felt was okay for them to do. So intense. I really enjoyed this read. Fantastic ink! Yours, Gypsy


  • LaVieSansCouleur
    January 3
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    I absolutely love this entire poem, from start to finish.

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