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[ white snow ]

white snow
and silent speaker
no converter

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A contest entry

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  • Harrisham Minhas
    January 17

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    Thanks for your entry:

    "white snow
    and silent speaker
    no converter"

    This is interesting. Nicely done.
    I am aware of these ads on TV.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas



  • Sai Babas Lotus
    January 7

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    Hi Pollycheck! Happy 2009! It's been a while since I dropped by to say 'Hi' to all my friends and especially to my haiku critiques and friends.

    I could not follow this haiku all that well. Snow, I know, is white. I assumed you meant it is a silent speaker and there the resonance lies. I could not understand L3. Does it mean that for each individual he or she must understand what the snow is trying to say on his or her own? Awaiting your reply.

    Regards,
    Charishma