I hear footsteps and open my eyes,
I see nothing but the dark of night,
The window is open, I had better close it.
I don’t want anything to bother me tonight.
As turning back, someone grabs me from behind,
It turns me around, is a good-looking guy.
He’s all dressed in black,
His face paler than the moon’s light.
I want to scream, but he covers my mouth,
And whispers, “shhh, everything’s alright…”
I get lost into his eyes, his hazel-colored eyes,
I didn’t even notice when he opened his mouth,
Showing his razor sharp fangs, they weren’t humanlike.
I feel something brush my neck,
His fangs are sinking into my veins,
I feel paralyzed as my blood drains.
As his fangs retract,
I feel a new strength and coldness creep into my limbs.
He looks at my puzzled face and says with a grim,
“Welcome to my world..."
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This is a great poem, but ugh, seriously, why does EVERYTHING having to do with a vampire, remind everyone of Twilight, seriously.. I've read the books three times, and not one vampiric poem has yet reminded me of Twilight in any way.. I mean wtf..
Grreeaattt poem though. (: -
dont change anything
its perfect i wish they were real the vampires -
I LOVE IT
O god your good haha wayyy better then me!!! haha i Love vampiers!!!! Really gOOODDD -
wow, this is so good, you had my jaw drop to the desk, its very good, you set a good picture i could see it in my minds eye, i love it absolutly love it, it reminds me of Twilight and how Bella wants to be a vampire, but i truelly do love this, omg, its great!! best wishes with your writing in the future!
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