The opulent moon
distant and unwavering;
reflects my own mood
Author notes
I tried to follow the haiku of Kobayashi Issa. The Accepted form of today's haiku is droll and repetitive to me
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not many words yet it said a lot... so your not in a real good mood huh? Anything I can do to help you get in a good one....???
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This is a great write. Thanks for sharing with the group!
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oh yes she does reflect anyone as her nature to detects what your emotions are, nice entry, thank you and good luck
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Reflective at a Distance...
Great work!!
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Thanks for your entry:
"The opulent moon
distant and unwavering;
reflects my own mood"
This is interesting.
Well-expressed.
Thanks again.
Harrisham Minhas
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lovely haiku, well done! the one thing I found to be a bit awkward, was that mood and moon almost rhymed, but not quite, and you couldn't tell whether it was intentional or not. I think it would be better if they either obviously did or obviously didn't. That's it really though, I like it!
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i agree the moon does reflect ones mood at times, been there as a moon child..lol thank you for this ku and good luck
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I get the picture here, being distant and unwavering comes in handy at times.
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