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slippery ~ senryu ~

 

 

immersed consciousness

 seeking tentative answers

 I think...or do I?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

A contest entry

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • individuality gold member
    May 17

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    i dunno do ya? i think i would like fifty pints but sadly there's no beer here, so i will drink poetry instead. a good poem.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    January 17

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    Thanks for your entry:

    "immersed consciousness
    seeking tentative answers
    I think...or do I? "


    A thought-provoking write.
    Nicely expressed.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas


  • Joseph Hollis
    January 5
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    Very contemplative. I like your thoughts. Best of luck to you in the contest!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 5

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    Nice...

    Love the background, and the words here you beautifully placed upon this poetic page. Thanks for sharing you, all the best!

    Peace, Timothy