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sun slowly rising

sun slowly rising
ending the blackness of night
raucous rooster crows

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  • Harrisham Minhas
    January 17

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    Thanks for your entry:

    "sun slowly rising
    ending the blackness of night
    raucous rooster crows"

    This is vivid.
    Nicely done.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    January 7
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    Wonderful imagery! I loved the alliteration in L1 and L3. My only suggestion would be to trim down from two -ing words to just one. Perhaps 'ends' would suit better in L2. Good use of the sense of sound in L3 and the sense of sight in L1 and L2.

    Goodluck,
    Charishma

  • amysticwriter silver member
    January 3
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    Love it...that rooster lives down the road from me...mari