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A stones throw away from Aanika’s analogy

I.

Poetry rounds her world
in the quiet of shoe box memories
open and airy

an expansion of sketched sounds that fill her head
like fractured light filters through curtains
complexly twisted into creation of self

scary shapes lie just beneath soul
concrete images molest her mind

and she writes

strokes pages gently
in search of everything

a Sunday kind of dreamer

I I.

Conversations wash over her fresh face
illuminated by sunsets and covered with dream-dust
lips quiver beneath glances

ripe words lay thick on tongue
an inhale of adjustments made

unable to deliver a taste of seasons
God weeps for her
in a singular moment of metaphors

I I I.

High voltage hope hangs
in misty morning colors of a rainbows arch
gentle winds bend laughter

dreams flutter like firefly wings
in the area behind eyes
emotion swims through her veins
a mere shade of introspect

IV.

She seeks only shelter from angles
to laugh at cloud shapes like a child and count backwards
riding waves where parallel waters intersect
a lifetime away from romance

so let her, please just let her pretend
to be weak in the knees
with confident kisses beneath flirty glances

and let her write about it later
at the black and white intersection of pen point
where she releases love beats of her heart
holding his smile between her hands


1/02/09

Author notes

Prompt: it's been a year....Dedication to Aanika for her 1 year anniversary

Thanks for the invite sweetie and hope to see you many years from now...

zochit2me

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  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 5

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    A wonderfully well written dedication to the talented poetess Aanika, I have good taste as you are both on my faves A pleasure to read and become enveloped within each vignette, wish I'd thought of " a Sunday kind of dreamer" and liked the repetition along with " at the black and white intersection of penpoint" Kudos.


  • aanika
    January 28

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    strokes pages gently
    in search of everything

    a Sunday kind of dreamer

    i LOVE that.

    She seeks only shelter from angles
    to laugh at cloud shapes like a child and count backwards
    riding waves where parallel waters intersect
    a lifetime away from romance

    I don't think you know how well this poem captured me. really, and truly, this was beautiful.
    thank you so much for entering.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    January 14

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    Wonderful, thoughtful, interestingly diverse in its descriptions of the subject; the kind of writing that makes one want to meet her! Very well done.


  • TabbyCat
    January 8
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    This is very fitting...Lovely, complex, and satisfying. Wonderful job.


  • Dalaney gold member
    January 4

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    i don't think i've read a more lovely and fitting tribute to someone...my God, but this is beautiful writing. you are incredible.

    laney
    xxoo

  • Gorgeous...

  • Rowan gold member
    January 3
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    I have nothing to say beyond what notorious said; gorgeous in intent and wording.


  • notorious gold member
    January 2
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    Aanika's GORGEOUS, and so is this.


  • stasis
    January 2

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    This is incredible... I love your use of alliteration here, but not only that. It is so Aanika. I wish I could put this as sweetly and intricately as you have just now. You have written something very beautiful, for a very beautiful person.

    We are all lucky to have known her.
    Best of luck in the contest!

    ♣ Tegan

    • zochit2me gold member
      January 2

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      Thank you Tegan


      and yes we are all so lucky to know her and embrace her beauty.

      ♥♥♥
      Becky
      ♥♥♥

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