'Tis that season again and we're reminded
time for gifts to be bought and given
in my heart though I feel truly saddened
for the greateast gift one can give is caring.
Many of us wake up each morn
all our needs are there, taken for granted
but tell me please, what if-
What about the family living in a car
no jobs to earn a living so no home
imagine their children hungry from no food
wearing clothes that are dirty
bathing in a near buy restroom
afterall if there's no money for food
there's no money for laundry-
We can do more as individuals
than many would even think
like take a moment to learn
what happened to that family
you may have a way to help
if not, together we can help them
leaving the past there, where it sits
finding ways to help them move forward
forget buying gifts for your family and friends
and give to this family instead-
I'm sure if you explain to all
why you're not buying gifts this year,
others will join you and soon
the family's needs will be met.
Imagine the caring of one and genoristy of many
to me this would be a great Christmas to celebrate.
We all love to give anyway, only in this case
we're giving of ourselves-
No, we can't save the world out there
and we'll never understand why so many
suffer, not having the normal comforts of life
but when I go to bed that night
I will be warm, warm from inside my soul
knowing I've done something good
and expected not one thing in return
can you think of a better gift-
Author notes
I hope this is what you wanted as I didn't see your previous contest rules.
A contest entry
- The Gift of Giving by Ammon.
5000 points, ended January 14, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I believe you hold one of the most powerful messages of all times in this piece, however I had a hard time "feeling" it, "connecting" with your words. Though you have a few grammatical errors, I usually disregard these (I just thought you might like to know). But this felt more like prose than a poem. It can be purified and worked upon to achieve a matching chord with the message so easily said. I did enjoy your message however. Thank you for entering. I will reread this as well as everybody elses at the end of my commenting. A few other people that are excellent in the art of writing will give to me their input (outside of allpoetry). I will then put together our scores and thoughts and judge this immediately. Best of luck to
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you can never
put Value on the gift of time my dear, this is an excellent write, Bravo Lil Sis
Blessings
Rend
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This was a beautiful piece that I believe is very true. You perfectly explained the need of people around us and how we can help them. I really liked the line "we can't save the world out there
and we'll never understand why so many
suffer" because it really is true, the whole world might not be saved but if people chip in they can save someone from suffering. Very good. Hope to see more by you
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Lovely Love
Check spelling can tell you wrote with heart instead of head. By and forego
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this is a fantastic, thoughtful and inspirational write!
i hope you're proud!
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