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Ascension



To hold with tangential rhyme
upon the aura spirals
emanating their illumined passage
while gaze and grazing
amid the pedestrian plateaus,
is to feel the cosmic tether
between life and universal love,
slowly ascend the translucent staircases,
acknowledge each step
as an ever growing shimmer in lucidity.

Suddenly, irreparably 
a schism rips in the mind,
stars streaking in their clarity,
mind imbued by a galactic awakening
tossed into the silvery thorn revelation
seeing with transplanted vision
from an eternal optometrist,
oneness erupts in the conscious,
stunning with its vivid unveiling,
harmony subdued by sensory distractions
becomes an immortal serenade
at last set free on a astral plain
where the notes of eternal meaning
flow their tranquil touch in the head,
lifting to become a denizen
of serendipity’s twinkle
radiant with its intense clarity,
heart beat aligned and in sync
with the cadence of everlasting truth.

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  • chilali
    January 18

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    This was just stunning. Great word choice. Amazing imagery! I loved it. Thanks for entering and good luck to you.


  • islekine gold member
    January 4

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    I do always enjoy your thoughts!

    from an eternal optometrist,
    oneness erupts in the conscious,
    stunning with its vivid unveiling,
    harmony subdued by sensory distractions
    becomes an immortal serenade
    at last set free on a astral plain
    where the notes of eternal meaning
    flow their tranquil touch in the head,
    I love this so...
    all of it is wonderful, as usual, but this really struck a chord in my soul...
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!


  • ZachP gold member
    January 4

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    Your writing is amazing . . . so very vivid, teeming with images and great comparisons.

    There isn't much for me to say; as I'm usually only long-winded when I'm giving critiques; and I have nothing for you.

    Good luck, and Best Wishes,
    Zach


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    January 3

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    I so love stumbling upon your work this way. You never fail to amaze me, your humble reader, with your use of the English language. Your vocabulary skills make me stun and the imagery they create are simply beautiful. My favorite part:

    "is to feel the cosmic tether
    between life and universal love,
    slowly ascend the translucent staircases"

    So lovely - I could feel the steps beneath my feet as I read.

    Thank you for sharing this & good luck in the contest!


  • Terry-too silver member
    January 3

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    This is a poem I want to read when I have no distractions around me. I will return.

    It takes me back a whack of years to the early 1960's when my dad suddenly died. Grieving, it flung me into an intensive study of spiritual esoterica that I may have seen mentioned here. I know it left me changed as a person even though a heap of time and distance interferes with intensities today.

    It is worth coming back.
    Terry


  • maralisa silver member
    January 2
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    aw wow a beautiful poem good luck inthe contestmaralisa

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