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Just Some Parallells For Aanika

 

 

Future Poetess Of The Masses

 

 

 

 

my eyes are manholes;
avoided, like the beggar on the street corner
in need of change.

"Your eyes are actually man bait,
even if you are not fishing for a compliment,
any beggar on the corner,

or even in fine castles 

as well as this artis himself 

were he blest with younger flesh
would dream of getting lost in them
longing for much more than quarter

of your endless wealth.
as you pass them by."


he is ignored
and I am cold too,
with four blankets gift-wrapped
under my skin.

 

"He is ignored because he spent his glory

in the dregs of bottles drained.

you have only been glorious 15 years,

since you last drained bottles,

warmed by mother's love.

Innocence is an unlit fire,

you will be cold until passions

burn bright, and the blankets

still unused that occupy your heart 

will warm others four score and then some."

 


These hands do not work well anymore.
they touch last years skin like a lonely sigh
with stories to tell, of a heart
with no more glued-on love to spare,
just dirty laundry under blankets
and a blue bicycle with wheels that spin
to the sound of 'I want to go home'.

 

"You will know much more sorrow and loneliness,

at fifteen, the pain is but training wheels,

for the big ride on a Harley through hell.

Your hands will learn to work the brakes

of despair, and the accelerator of sheer joy.

lonely sighs will be backwashed

in the breathlessness of worlds

yet to explore before you go home."



I am a battery, uncharged;
you breathe in my positives
and spit out negatives.
you are a three am fire alarm, loud
and I am forced to peel my dreams from pillows
and stumble down the stairs, only to hear
'it's too cold to be outside these days,
will you let me back in?'
you make it rain
and my eyelashes do not
make good windshield-wipers anymore.

 

"You will be an energizer, your poetry already

stimulates electrical synapses in the minds of many,

you are some bunny loved for dreams peeled

from pillows to scripted thoughts to pages read.

some will be tear stained, we all suffer for the art,

it makes it all the more precious when it is written.

lash out and let the salt spray fly,

you inhabit others dreams now, your words

take them to places they can only wish

they had known."

I lean over the sink,
eyes dragged towards the mirror
where a girl with goosebumps and water-colour eyes,
with handlebar clavicles and cellophane skin
supports her weight on wrists
as if something inside
has lost consciousness
because you have found yourself
somewhere among sad songs,
cream acrylic paintings
and six-sided stars,

 

"Let your life, your pain and your joy, be a mirror,

that sends goosebumps over the reader's flesh,

let pigments of your water coloured  visions,

dancing lightly from your wrist,

create a lost and found for other conciousnesses,

to peer into the cellophane skin of your poetic heart.

they will find answers that elude you,

but touch the darkened spaces of their own souls.

let sad songs wail, joyous bliss cavort,

fingerpaint smiles, in ink stained endeavors,

until your star becomes stellar,

and all the world makes wishes on you."

 

"Be the torch that I pass,

to younger poets,

as my years slip like mercury splashed

across the vast void of what was.

and know that even after only 12 months

you are loved for the spells you

have checked and then cast here."

 

 

 

 

 

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This poem is by Artis for aanika

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  • aanika
    January 28

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    some will be tear stained, we all suffer for the art,
    it makes it all the more precious when it is written.
    lash out and let the salt spray fly,
    you inhabit others dreams now, your words
    take them to places they can only wish
    they had known.

    wow.
    this is the highest and most beautiful flattery I have ever received. thank you so much for writing this.

    your poetry in this is gorgeous.
    I love the way you incorporated pieces of my own poem, and then made them beautiful by writing your own responses.

    thank you so much.

  • Breathtaking. Beautifully crafted. Simply amazing. I do not stand even the slightest chance in this contest. Good luck! <3


  • artis
    January 12
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    I have added your name to this poem because as you know half of the work is yours, that I drew paralells too.

    Thanks for a great contest.

  • wendymolly
    January 5

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    one word.... "INTENSE" beautifully crafted and full of a life that has passed by in years passing those years on like a torch is simply well founded.
    Hope you win Gold with this. take care always,
    Tandy.


  • petalblue2
    January 3

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    WOW! I am most certain that this is gold. What a creative masterpiece with poetic, lavishly placed language and linguistically surmised advice married together as one. Truly a treasure


  • etoile
    January 3

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    oh my god.
    aanika will love this.
    wow this is beautiful, amazing.
    your imagery is amazing, and i love how you took pieces of her poems and then wrote about it yourself. this is actually so good.


  • Jasmine Rayne
    January 2

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    stunning

    Oh my God. I have read some really great things on this site before, but nothing quite like this. It was absolutely beautiful. Your talent provokes inspiration and [admittedly] intimidation in me. My favourite line:

    "from pillows to scripted thoughts to pages read.

    some will be tear stained, we all suffer for the art,

    it makes it all the more precious when it is written.

    lash out and let the salt spray fly,"

    I would wish you good luck in the contest, but I hardly think you need it. :] This was such a pleasure to read. I needed to see something great like this today. Thank you.








    -Lily♥


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    January 2

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    Hun, this is what you do best, I have seen it so many times in my own contests, you just connect to reality and tell it how it is. the wording if perfection and I am sure aanika will be left as breathless as I have been of the touching of one heart to another. Gorgeous. And some to boot. Best to you in the contest but for me this was so much more!

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