The COLD tile chills her skin, GOOSEBUMPS f.o.r.m.
as she sits on her knees{SCARED} for what to cum-----
D
O
W
N .....goes the zipper, on this unknown man,
{Insignificant} & {replaceable} To the "KING" who S
----- T
A
N
D
Shes just his momentary s-l-a-v-e
A girl to do his BiDdInGs, A (Whore) on c.a.l.l.
that NO ONE cares about our ~loves~.
He pulls [IT] o u t ..... she delivers *sweetcandykisses*
& after not to long gets CURSED with a \t\a\n\g\y\ SUPRISE
She remains on the f.l.o.o.r, Shamed at what she'd just done,
as the MAN who S
T
A
N P and leaves without a word................
D U
S zips back
She CURLS up in a ball, as the tears begin to F~~~~~~~L~~~~~~~O~~~~~~~W~~~~~
She CrAdLeS b.a.c.k & f.o.r.t.h in an attempt to *comfort* herself.
When she finally S
T
A
N
D
S FILLED with S.H.A.M.E,
She looks |INTO| the mirror and see's nothing but a S.l.u.t...
WISHING she could go back to the ~girl~ she used to be.
Regain her lost i.n.n.o.c.e.n.c.e, and Forget about the woman she'd
-B-E-C-O-M-E-
Author notes
This is my 1st dirty pretty ever and was written for a contest, Im not sure how it is..... please let me know if there is anything I can work on to make it better, Thanks 
This poem isn't true to me either. But i hope you like it.
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"evil angels are the best kind"
Hey! dirty pretty Is pretty much just emphasis on particular words using punctuation.
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Comments
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wow this amazing, i love this, great write for your first dirty pretty, i wish i could write dirty pretty this well, i loved all of it and your emphasis and effects on the words was great!
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Again, I really like the way you shaped this. You do very well with dirty pretty poems and I want to congratulate you on that. Usually, it would seem over-punctuated and awkward, but you find a unique way to make it still flow and intrigue the reader.
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She remains on the f.l.o.o.r, Shamed at what she'd just done,
as the MAN who S
T
A
N P and leaves without a word................
D U
S zips back
I love this!
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This is great for your first dirty.pretty. I liked this. It's rich with emotion and the imagery is great. I liked how you used "up" and this was wow. I'm impressed with this. I do suggest you put this as an "adult" write in your categories though. Very nicely done.
Josh -
Wow, it's amazing... dare I say beautiful? despite the painful subject.
You have captured the emotions brilliantly and I don't think I'm saying that just because I can relate to the poem and so know what those feelings are anyway.
Really good write =]
x x x -
this is amazing. you describe this pain so well
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I think it is well done. I also think that you captured the shame of this kind of anonymous sex very well.
Great job.
Mike -
i like this. not bad for a first attempt.
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omg i just recently went throught the same thing... this is really beautiful.. i love it... and just know your not alone in this feeling... !
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