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Shimmering Glimmers Of Faith

Visions from my window's pane.

Glistening blanket fill of white,

Shed in palemoon's wintry reign.

luminescence in chilled blight.

 

 

 

Untouched, untrod feathered spill,

Pledged to earth, shimmering down.

coveting Spring's daffodils,

In hushed slumber, under ground.

 

 

Not unlike a bride's trousseau,

Her veil  floating on sheer faith.

That love outlast depths unknown,

And her love shall not forsake.

 

by Suseann

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    February 6, 2009

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    Wow..what a contribution you gave here through the wonderful and impressive immagery in the poem ...thanks for sharing such a impressive piece..


  • Rowan gold member
    January 27, 2009

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    That last stanza Suseann is stunning; especially this;
    "Not unlike a bride's trousseau,"
    your meter is outstanding as well, this is a perfect example of how to do rhyme. Very beautiful work.


    • suseann
      January 27, 2009
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      Finally... a fem commentor! Hip hip hurray! Thanks for that generous comment girlfriend!


  • Tirrell
    January 21, 2009

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    "And her love shall not forsake."
    This line echoes the whole poem, it is wonderful in all its tranquil beauty, love the imagery, and cadence of the lines. It sort of sings in melancholey, with a touch of bliss. Very enchanting my friend!


    • suseann
      January 21, 2009
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      Thank you Tirrell. . I'm a bit confused by the fact,not one of my female favs has read this or commented. It's basically metaphor of snowfall and it's purity when untrod. That is beautiful to see,if you don't have to contend with trudging out into it in slippery bitter cold.


  • penman gold member
    January 17, 2009
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    Wonderful

    Such a terrific write. So very well expressed. Thank you for sharing.


  • Malabu
    January 3, 2009
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    Her veil floating on sheer faith
    love the thoughts of this
    actually the whole poem


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 2, 2009

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    SO LOVELY!!!!!!

    To me there is nothing that can compare to a big snowfall on a quiet and calm night.'s

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