See me standing in the rain, waiting for your kiss
Enrage a sense lost long ago, hidden in a wish
Nighttime comes and sight is lost, feel my presence near
Singing to the stars above, taste the twinkle in my tears
Elope with me to this lightened world, out of the abyss
SENSE my love, enroll in bliss
Tickle my heart with your feather of hope
Hear my passions song
Ignite the fire within my soul
Stay in my arms, where you belong
THIS is love,it's been so long
Life is too short to give up hope
Of love, of feeling, and of warmth
Value the strength it takes to feel
Educate the senses, that i refuse to conceal
LOVE is forever, and forever is love
show me this is real
xx
Author notes
"Another pain in the @$$ rule"
a plea to a second love, after being burned before. to let 'me' love them, and to love them back,no to be afraid of the senses that make up love...etc etc
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Tickle my heart with your feather of hope
Hear my passions song
Ignite the fire within my soul
Stay in my arms, where you belong
I enjoyed these lines the most and overall this was a lovely write
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What a wonderful take on the prompt of love. I love the gentleness in this one... Reminds me of something that has been said to me before. Great job!
Best of luck in this contest!
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This was so sweet. I enjoyed reading it immensely. Good job! And GOOD LUCK!!
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This is absolutely beatiful and I love the way you used the senses to describe love.
I have a couple of constructive comments.
1. "See my standing in the rain" - me not my ?!
2. "Of love, of feeling, and warmth" - this line would flow better if you put another "of" before warmth.
3. not a big deal but it kinda made me laugh - second is misspelled in your AN
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ok, thanks
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