Roses are red
and I am too
when he whispers
he loves me true.
A crimson blush
across my cheeks
each time we kiss
he takes a peek.
He has this way
to touch me so
I'm covered soon
in a passionate glow.
Roses are red
and I am too
an innocent blush
my love's so true!
A contest entry
- Rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrroses by ScreaminMime.
1750 points, ended January 3, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I absoutely loved it
this was so cute and innocent great job
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Roses are red,
what a great write.
Thanks for the entry,
hope he don't bite!
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i have a question.....
what about him do you love??
who is he?
how did you meet him.
i would add these answers into your poem.
He has this way
to touch me so
I'm covered soon
in a passionate glow.
that part^^^^ seems a bit awkward to me.
if i were to revise that poem, i would take out those 4 lines and replace those lines with four other ones that answer my questions.
i really loved these lines:
Roses are red
and I am too
when he whispers
he loves me true.
that is really nice.......
i think instead of talking about blushing twice you should add in another line about something else you like about him.......
hope you appreciate my suggestions. -
nice =]
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