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you're just another memory to get rid of

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I don't want to move on. It's too hard and I don't think I can do it. Do you realize what I go through everyday? The screams the walls echo and the beatings they take. [and I don't mean the walls] 

 

I've always heard that home is where the heart is. Maybe I need a transplant then, so I can make everything right. Or at least better. Some days I wonder why I even fell in love. I knew you wouldn't love me like I wanted and you

were just like all the others.

 

~ and all the others were daddies and I'm not ready to be a mother ~

 

              i. On the first date you held me, told me everything would be okay. That we would be forever. I liked it that way. Like when you gave me your jacket because I was cold. I'll never forget that.

 

              ii. Now that you have me "hook, line, and sinker", or so you think, is this when you quit showing me love? I'm just another glamour whore to add to your collection. You feast upon the goods I have until another "trophy" comes along. Now I'm reminded why I hated guys so much.

 

              iii. You can bury me with regret, if you want to. I, however, refuse to live this life in your arms. I can't be embraced by deceit and false intentions. I am just another option in your multiple choice. And as much as I wish I could still keep my "In A Relationship" status on Facebook and MySpace, I think I'll just blog about how much of a wreck you made me.

 

Girls travel in packs.

Remember that.

 

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Pic Credit: http://ritacream.deviantart.com/art/dark-14145534

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  • SubKitten
    May 15

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    Interesting piece. The emotion is wonderfully expressed. And the descriptions really hold the piece together. However, this reads like a story more than a poem. The "stanzas" are more like paragraphs.

  • Love it.


  • Symphony
    February 22

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    Right ... to be honest...

    I liked this, but I don't see how it counts as a poem - even as 'prose' it's still not quite a ... well, not to me, I'm afraid -

    It seems more like a blog entry, just like you said you would blog about it, or a journal entry, but certainly not poetry - you don't tend to read passages like this and think of poetry...

    with that said, i've fallen in love with some other entries in this contest which couldn't be said to be poetry either so I'm not going to disqualify this but anyway!

    sorry to hear you had to go through relationship pain like this, it never gets any easier - and we can never predict what's going to happen in the future ...

    i enjoyed reading this, thanks for entering


  • aanika
    January 28

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    Maybe I need a transplant than

    than --> then

    Someday's I wonder

    someday's --> some days

    I knew you wouldn't love me like I wanted and you
    were just like all the others.

    love that.

    I, however, refuse to live this live in your arms.

    live this live --> live this life?

    overall, this was pretty effective. nice topic to write about, and I really felt the emotion.

    thanks so much for entering!

  • beautiful brother. I love the layout it really enlightens the reader and draws his/her attention to your wonderfully, well chosen words! I could not read a better piece written by your hand! Keep on writing!


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    January 3

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    Some guys are jerks and like to control women. That isn't love. You captured the emotions so well. Thank you for sharing your poetry with me.


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 2

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    Raw emotion, and I felt like I was there. And I have been in my own way. Great write, and good luck in the contest

    ♥ Kathraina

  • this is amazing, a very beautiful write.


  • Hikari Lady
    January 2

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    Wow!! Loved how you ended this and I really was absorbed by the words. Very powerful write, good luck.

    Much love
    ~Noor


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 2

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    Awww this is heartwrenching. I know what you mean though and hell I think people should know that by now. That woman hurt just as much as men do. As in, woman HURT men as much as men hurt woman. Anyway hope this isn't based on real happenings. Loves always.


  • aanika
    January 2
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    screenname in AN please
    even though I already know who this is

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