Today you should have faced the truth,
did you take the time to cry?
And mourn the flower of faded youth,
and the things that passed you by?
Or did you turn that stubborn head,
from the things you should have learned?
From the wounded loves you left for dead,
to the bridges behind you burned.
Author notes
There are those who are so self-absorbed they leave a trail of wreckage behind them where ever they go. Will they ever learn?
Please tell me what you think
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Stirrer,
Thank you for your kind words regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I'm afraid the motivation for this piece was not as high minded as you might have imagined. In reality, I wrote this to express my heartbreak over a lost love. The original was much longer and filled with the frustration and confusion that always accompanies unrequited love. At the time, I couldn't understand why she couldn't see how perfect we were together.How wrong I was.If we would have stayed together, I would be dead by now.
Well, live and learn.
Thanks again,
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The piece is great - the rhythm and rhyme flow together for a smooth read. Makes me think of what Jesus said on the cross:
"Forgive them Father, for they know not what they do."
ya All~Ways,
~ Jan ~
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I stand corrected.
This was a real soulsearcher for me. This is something that applies to me.
Thank you Sir for this piece and wish you a long life.
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Your title really piqued my interest, and I'm glad it did because this poem really spoke to me. So many people in all kinds of situations would be able to relate to these sentiments, and they are ideas that everyone would benefit from being reminded of every now and then. Readers of this will have no choice but to face serious introspection upon reading this, and that's a good thing. Very impressive, I'm a fan.
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Temporarybeauty,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
This poem was inspired by painful personal experience, yet it taught me a great life lesson. Self absorbed people are incapable of true love. They can never rise above their own self-interest and are unable to give anything of themselves. They can only demand that their partners edify their exalted position in life.
Drybones
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Well written. A cool idea for suresy
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Thank you for your critique of my poem,"Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
Drybones
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I always seem to have time to cry and mourn my faded youth ... this write made me ponder though ... do I ever learn. I don't think I leave a trail of wreckage but I l always seem to find one left for me ...
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Nice contrast in diction with the two stanzas
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Oh my but this one does hit close to home. I indeed had to take the time to cry when faced with the truth of my faded youth and misdeeds. In fact I have taken many opportunities to cry and still do so when needed. God gave us tear ducts for a reason. It is cleansing rain for the soul.
Wonderful penning,
Blessings,
Frogz~
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well written
it ends rather abrubtly, but the content is very good. i love the title and consequently that's my favorite line in the poem. your author's notes are my second favorite part.
and how true...i hope that we all, myself included, learn to be more responsible w/others. we are much more fragile than we look!!
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Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?" I appreciate it more than you know.
Drybones
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Nice write!! I enjoyed it =)
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Oooh, I really liked this!
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Powerful in its brevity. The notes explain the poem well. Unfortunately, "preaching to the choir" is more than just a figure of speech. Those who most need to mend their ways will never seek out the help and guidance they need. It must be so difficult to be a counselor and a minister and see so many troubled lives. You really must have great faith for it to not weigh you down.
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I don't think those people will ever learn. This poem had a really nice flow too. I like it a lot.
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StormyDawn,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?" I'm pleased you took the time to read and comment.
Drybones
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Dear Friend....It is a subject that perhaps many more of us need to contemplate....It is like a fallout from a bomb....How we need to take heed to your words!
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Rose,
Thank you for your comments regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?" You are most kind.
Also, thank you for your words of encouragement regarding my move to Florida. I am working in a Gospel Rescue Ministry dealing with men who are homeless and addicted.
Although I have been involved in rescue ministry for a number of years, I have never ceased to be amazed at how God's power can transform the most egregious sinner.
"Live long and prosper!"
Drybones
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the words in this are amazing. the rhyming is amazing. its short and to the point. i love it!!it tells so much for such a simple work. this is something you can almost live by. it makes you think about what your doing in your own life. that impesses me. that such a little poem can give such a big impact.Impressive!=)
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Carebear,
Thank you for your kind remarks on my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I realize it is a simple poem, but many times simplicity is the best way to express a complex issue.
Drybones
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Nicely penned. It is short (which I like) The rhyme is very good but the last line seems forced. "behind you burned" .... maybe it's just me. It's because the phrase is usually, burning all of your bridges behind you" and here the phrase is reversed for the sake of rhyming. (or so it seems.) An enjoyable read anyway.
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PetiteMarie,
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?" I appreciate your comments more than you know.
As for the last line seeming "forced," I plead "poetic license" as a defense.
Thanks again,
Drybones
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some people juss leep going and dont look back and dont break down for they are affraid of what will happen if they do. so they keep going and try to stay strong out of pure fear. though i like the way you show how most people see this
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BlackenedAngel-X,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
You are right.....many people never look back at the wreckage they leave behind. Tis a sad commentary on the human condition.
Drybones
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There are some that never take the time to look back and learn. For some it is a simple case they have no real concept of what they do and other simply don't care but luckily most people have some conscious thoughts about where the path through life takes them.
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Spyders Mate,
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
You are right.....some people just don't care how much damage they do in their relationships. Sad commentary on the human animal.
Drybones
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i guess they only learn when the lose something that truly meant a lot to them... nicely penned hunni this is awesome loved the flow and the rhyme very well done!
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Thank you so much for your kind remarks regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I'm sure you could tell that it was based on personal experience.
Drybones
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Cold-hearted and ruthless bastards...it is sad that some people can be so cold and thoughtless of their actions...
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Voodoo,
Thanks for the accolades on my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I really appreciate your comments.
Drybones
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loved this poem...wise wise poem...thanks for opening
our cabin fever windows...as winter is possessive...
and freedom...is just outside our heart and doors
waiting to be explored! well done poet!
ears/Seattle
loved it!
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ears,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I must say that yours is the most poetic comment I have ever gotten on any poem I have posted on this site.
Thanks again,
Drybones
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this write has good even flow and the tone is not harsh even though the theme is very sharp ... just a simple question. however, the response ...
thanks.
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Motel,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem,"Did You Take The Time To Cry?" I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Thanks again,
Drybones
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I totally agree with this poem of yours!
Very powerful and something to think about.
Great thought that you have penned here.
Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep up the
wonderful work here!
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Jeremy0826,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?" I appreciate it more than you know.
Drybones
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I totally agree! I know many people like this...
All the rest of us can do is hope to be more self aware and avoid leaving any carnage in our wake.
Great poem!
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Kiwigirljacks,
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
Drybones
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Whoa. That was powerful and incredible thought provoking.
Wow.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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SpydurPoet,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem, "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I appreciate it more than you know.
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SpydurPoet,
Thank you for your kind remarks concerning my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
I appreciate it more than you know.
Drybones
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wow. this inspires me a lot i love the general tone of the poem and the message you are sending. it is very true that people are selfish and don't take the time to learn from their pasts. bravo
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bookwrm,
Thank you for your kind remarks regarding my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
It is encouraging to see someone of your tender age taking such interest in poetry. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Thanks again,
Drybones
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Most sage words, indeed, and we would do well to heed them! Brilliantly concieved poem and flawlessly penned!! Loved it!
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Michael,
Thank you for your comments on my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
Any accolades coming from one with your talent is a complement indeed.
Fred
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I liked your idea very much, the words were put well in
line so there is no excuse for being able to say-"What?"...mac
Belated Merry Christmas- I hope it was lovely . May you New Year be a year to happiness nd as sittle stress as possible, your friend...mac
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Mac,
Thanks for your comments on my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
Hope you had a great Christmas and may the new year be filled with many blessings.
Drybones
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Very interesting. I have a couple of friends and family like that. Yes, there is a time when they learn, but it's mostly when they've lost a lot do they realize. Good two stanzas you have there. They rhyme beautifully, and they speak to my heart. Your contributions are benevolent, and quite frankly, always worth the read.
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem "Did You Take The Time To Cry?"
Some people are so self-centered they don't care how many people they destroy in their relationships. They can't commit because they are always looking for something better. Sadly, they don't recognize true love when when it is offered to them, nor do they understand what a priceless treasure true love really is. That's what this poem is about.
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