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An Uneasy Treat

So bite my fair fingers
They pluck only the strings
Of your dreams, not mine.
What an ungrateful snap of the jaw
You poor, unhappy thing.
So squeeze my wide eyes shut
I long for your colours – your visions…
- and abandoned my own
What a misfortune.

And the respect I found
Swallowed me whole
Bitter tasting, sloppy textured,
I’m sure I was… an uneasy treat
For such a haggish lie.

Feel me, my prickles
Shave the lengths off my smile.
Look at you, looking at me…
Staring straight through my fraught gaze
With bitter sweet thoughts
Of how this should have been…

So, my clever, vacant coward…
write me a screenplay kiss.
One kiss, higher than space
And deeper than its sun. . .
A kiss, so desperate that we split in half
And laugh
At how greedy we can be.

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by Emma B

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  • awannabepoet
    July 10

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    And they called it Stormy, Stormy Emmy when love came in the form of a simple kiss written on the edges of a withered screenplay tinged with yellow stains and some sips of spilled coffe bits.


  • Jazzlyn
    April 1
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    i liked it but it confused me a bit
    still good


  • individuality gold member
    April 1

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    ah dreams and love and the taste it can leave in the back of the throat if not shared - let's write a opne sided love poem, it will fit in the square hole i think. a good poem.


  • SoundsOfSilence
    March 16

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    This is very creative, it was interesting to read. Thank you very much for entering my contest.

    ~~KitKat


  • Night Terrors
    March 10

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    This was very cool! I am glad you entered it.

    The Positives:

    Very cool imagery here. i like how it sounds out loud too.

    The negatives:

    None that I can see great job

    My favorite part:

    And the respect I found
    Swallowed me whole
    Bitter tasting, sloppy textured,
    I’m sure I was… an uneasy treat
    For such a haggish lie.


    This was very cool I read it several times thanks for entering

  • ichigosama
    March 10

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    ichigosama

    i like it though you didnt state why you wrote it. very vivid details and lots of imagery. good job and thanks for entering!!!

  • Bob Fox
    March 9

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    Poet

    Why not tell it like it is? lol But I think he gets the message. Short of like saying .. Go to hell now buddy.


  • Til the Day I Die
    March 8
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    well

    i like this. it's really good. very discriptive. best of luck in my contest


  • Terry Collett
    February 26
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    Beautifully done.

    Feel me, my prickles
    Shave the lengths off my smile.
    (Love these lines.)


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 13
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    wow!

    metahorpically masterful..wow this really hits..


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    January 14

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    What an awesome story Emmy! Would you mind if I made you a favorite? You seem like a very knowledgeable writer. Intelligent may have been the word I sought. I'll be watching from across the pond.

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