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Future Dreams?

 

 

 

He told me I should meet him where the water meets the land
although it’s not a bright and sunny day,
not one for big surprises, though I don’t know what he’d planned
but for me, I knew I couldn’t stay away.

The sky was grey, the clouds rolled by, a chill was on the breeze
the pathway to the beach was swept and blown,
white horses climbed the rolling waves of winter’s icy seas
as I hurried to the shore this time, alone.

The sands still had a golden hue, devoid of anyone
no foot steps anywhere that I could see,
from the grey, the clouds gave way and bathed the beach with sun
a trail of deep red roses just for me.

I picked them up from Neptune’s bed and followed where they led
to find my lover waiting with a smile,
champagne beside two glasses and a blanket for the bed
maybe we would stay for just a while.

We ate and drank and huddled close, we kissed and talked some more
about the future life that we would share,
he asked me if I’d marry him right there upon the shore
it seemed as though we hadn’t got a care.

Later in the summer months beneath a deep blue sky
we said our wedding vows, exchanged  the rings,
I felt like I was watching as a tear ran from my eye
and to my dreams and hopes my heart now clings.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    January 3

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    The sense of wariness in the beginning is so realistic, especially in dreams; and then the progress down the beach, to the culmination of the rings -- just so lovely, and yes, dream-like. The form is well-crafted as always, and the touch of whimsy is very enjoyable!


  • arafura gold member
    January 3
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    Wonderfully well written. A joy to read!


  • moonbumps silver member
    January 3

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    Absolutely top notch - loved this from start to finish and truly a dream to read-a lovely dream to be in....
    always
    Hilly xxx


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 2

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    Don't wake up too soon, your usual lovely meter and tight rhyming gives this poem quite an edge add that to A1 content and all is looking first class

  • Bad Bill
    January 2
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    Superbly romantic and with great flow to boot! Very, very good.

    Best wishes,
    Bill


  • Sunshine Always
    January 2
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    Wonderful Sue, absolutely wonderful...mal


  • doolie gold member
    January 2

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    Sue this is absolutely beautiful and very romantic. Good luck in the contest.
    Laura


  • LadySerenity
    January 2

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    This is absolutely lovely I love the picture being painted here. Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck.

    ~*Lady Serenity

    PS the background is beautiful. I love it.

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