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Of Life and darkness..

Dark trees of  my life,
crowding and hiding sunlight,
enchanting in rivulets of passion,
streaks of love break from above,
finding path amidst madness.

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  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    January 2

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    this is so spell binding.... the entire poem..... the last line most...finding path amidst madness.
    Chilling...yet understandable..

    becca


  • Hikari Lady
    January 2

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    Liked how dark it started and how hopeful it ended. Nice describtion of the trees as hiding the light. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    ~Noor


  • Unsigned gold member
    January 2
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    Nice take...

    Liked the way the path became a pathway of the mind.

    Goos luck

    Simon

  • ElectricBloom
    January 2

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    this is fantastic, i love it.
    so morbid and dark, and the last line is excellent. so powerful and chilling, a beautiful ending.

    best of luck in the contest!

    ElectricBloom