She reflects your face.
Sweet, yes that was you, my dear mother.
Great patience ,was your good possession.
You loved, gentle like soft clear rain,
refreshing to my spirit, indeed.
Now it's gone, vanished into nowhere.
You're bitter, a sharp tongue condemning.
How your hard edge, scares and saddens me.
Pain's captured your soul, it wilts away.
I cry out, "Mommy", you're just not there,
A feather blown into strong winds.
She reflects your face, she's just not you,
having your echo with different word.
I've lost someone I esteem and love.
Buried in life's treturious soil,
burned by white hot flames of agony.
No you'll never return to me.
I grieve my tragic loss in my time,
feeling hurt and abandoned once more.
My emotions darken with thick clouds,
in my spirit black roses rain down.
She reflects your face, she's just not you.
Author notes
This is a poem about how I miss the person my mom used to me
What do you think,gently speak your mind .
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Aww, this is sad. Beautifully written and a great write, but sad. Keep your head up, hon. There's always tomarrow.
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a sad write
but so beautifully penned
your words echo the page -
Aww my friend...I am sure your Mother...the one you remember...will come back. Life creates shadows that mask the faces of those we love. She is no doubt in a place where she needs to be right now...in time she will 'find' herself again and be the person you remember. Well written.
Mariana
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There is something so mysterious about this poem, because you speak in such love yet contrasted by sharp unsettling tones that you do not explain or hint about. I can see that you are an excellent writer. I simply love the first stanza- it is my favorite. I will look forward to checking out your other poetry.
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I like u it a lot it a very sad n agonisen poem........it reminds me of my mum.....it sad how as they grow older their loving side seems to die........
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Very sad, I am sorry. You have a beautiful mind.
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Beautiful Words
Your poem has struck agony into my heart, and my pity is for you. What a stunning piece! I feel your pain, I feel your absolute fear and depression. This is really a fatastic write, although I feel rather sad while reading. I'm so sorry for your trecherous hurting. I experience mood swings from my brother and it hurts me, but I cannot imagine the pain you go through. I love this piece, words beautifully describe your troubles.
Love it, sorry,
Shannon
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thats sad.
but a really great poem.
(:
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I liked "black roses rained down" it is a good expression. this poem seems like it comes from the heart and the pain is real and raw. nice job
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Very strong. Great expressive writing.
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Wow, this is so touching. Great write. I can see that you're hurt very much. Keep up the great writing.
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your thoughts are well penned stevie.
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Very nicely written, you've expressed your feelings very clearly and the end result is distinctly dignified.
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well done.. well expression.. i love it i can feel the word and imagery is so real and heartfelt... thanks for sharing
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10/10
Your poem not only reflects her from before and now but like me my mother turn out the same way so I give u smapthy and your rythem to ur poetry is great but remember help is always around the corner, kk she change? Why? When? How? Does she have a reason
I love it
Good luck
Lovve lexi xxx
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Very heartfelt, sad. I like your poem, it seems as if you are talking to someone else about the person your mom use to be, or maybe a mirror image?
Kind of makes the reader want to know what happened to embitter the mother so much.
Great expression!
I'm thinking lose in the last stanza was meant to be loss
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