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My Love Will Never Die

Beautifully broken-down, battling,            the

Memories of your breath on my neck,        with your

Assertive arms absorbing me,                    even now       

Bitter-sweet memories of blazing kisses    and...

...your body lying breathless before me

A contest entry

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  • Overcast
    January 2
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    Very powerful imagery for such a short piece!
    Good luck and thanks for entering


  • Angelflower
    January 2

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    Beautiful and dark in a way... You wrote this so softly! I truly love it! thanks much for sharing! best of luck in the contest!

    Angel