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I'm Gunna Tell On You



I taut I saw a puddy tat
Curled up on my bed
If he won't move his furry self
I'll just lie on his head
This cat bed just ain't big enough
To hold more than my bum
That makes my sleeping bloody tough
I think I'll go tell  Mum.

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  • Symphony
    March 28

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    LOL very well written, gave me a chuckle!

    Thanks for entering and sharing with us all


    • rbruce gold member
      March 28
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      I am pleased you like this one. Written just for fun. We have dogs and cats and my interpretation is from watching what our pets do at times. I'm sure they run to Lis and tell tales at times. Many thanks for your thoughts.


  • SpiritMother
    February 1

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    HOW FUNNY! I can just see you curled up in that little place...LOL..sure did need a smile today and you brought it about!

    • rbruce gold member
      February 1
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      Thank you for enjoying my bit of fun. There has a lot of serious writing going on and when i saw this picture I couldn't resist it.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 7
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    hehe... very cute indeed!!

    • rbruce gold member
      January 7
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      We have cats and dogs, and I'm pretty sure my dogs would react as I wrote if a cat dared to occupy one of their personal places. Many thanks Jackie, for your comments.


  • Shadow Life
    January 6
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    omg!

    this is so funny, and so cute. please don't revise it!

    • rbruce gold member
      January 6
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      I shall not revise it. It's a real laugh a minute as is. Thanks for commenting and pleased you enjoyed it.


  • Elisabeth silver member
    January 6

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    Spot on!



    Lis


    • rbruce gold member
      January 6
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      Thank you, my love, as you know it was a lot of fun to write.


  • arafura gold member
    January 3
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    Love it!

    • rbruce gold member
      January 3
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      this was an fun write which i thoroughly enjoyed. i have always had dogs and cats at home and those few lines seemed to fit the picture. Many thanks, my friend.

  • amysticwriter silver member
    January 3
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    You have captured the image perfectly...Gold for sure...lol...

    • rbruce gold member
      January 3
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      i have always had cats and dogs as house pets and could imagine my dog doing exactly as I wrote. Don't touch the cat, just tell on him. thanks for your comments and support.


  • doolie gold member
    January 3

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    This is so cute. I'm setting here laughing. This picture made it easy and fun to write for the contest.
    Good luck.
    Laura

    • rbruce gold member
      January 3
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      It was indeed a fun write, I saw the picture and that little poem was there, ready to go.
      Many thanks for your comments and thoughts, i do appreciatethem.


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    January 2

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    What a delightful little poem. Best of luck to you in this contest

    • rbruce gold member
      January 2
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      Many thanks Julie, for your comments on my little bit of humourous nonsense. I should put the picture prompt up so people can easily see what the poem is about.


  • Jesann gold member
    January 2
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    Ha Ha...this is so cute, love it !!
    Well done.


    • rbruce gold member
      January 2
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      Thanks for your comments on this little bit of fun. When I saw the picture prompt I couldn't resist it

  • Bob Fox silver member
    January 2
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    Lol

    Hey Bob anther cutie my friend. Perhaps I wil send you my 21 lb cat for some cuddling. lol

    • rbruce gold member
      January 2

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      Many thanks for the offer ,my friend, but he would have no chance here with my three cats and three dogs. Unless he likes to wait in the queue for his cuddles and his meals.


  • condor gold member
    January 2

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    Geez! You made me laugh so much. I have tears running out my eyes. Thanks! Great write with excellent flow and the rhyme and rhythm were spot on. Terrific, what more can i say? I can't, I'm laughing too much. Thanks for entering.

    • rbruce gold member
      January 2
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      Your comments have just made my day, thank you so much. We have cats and dogs so this contest really took my eye. Lis is currently working what the cat did to her computer when it walked over the control keys.

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