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Like a Deadened Shell



I watch her face fall as if it was a crumbling wall
Highlighting the sleeplessness in her eyes
I stare at her ashen face as it turns away from me.

I reach out to stop her,
To show her the truth of what she is really is
                                          …only to be stopped.

As she lets out a whimper,
I draw her face back to mine
Pleading with my eyes for her
                            to find the strength to live
Just to step back from the mirror.


But why is it that we are dying on the outside,
When the flame of life burns unnoticed?



Author notes

The prompt was:

Rachel's Torch by ~theta-rose

http://theta-rose.deviantart.com/art/Rachel-s-Torch-97614341



I'm DancingWithDarkness, real name Kate amd I was looking for a dad

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  • islekine gold member
    January 2

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    Beautifully penned!

    Maybe we will be family...I applied...but asked for a weird position...so not sure!
    best wishes in the contest and always!

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  • ZachP
    January 2

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    This is a beautiful poem =]

    That picture is one of my favorite creations, and you did it such wonderful justice =]

    The poem is beautiful, and it seems like something that might be reflected within my own mind.

    And in case you're interested in who Rachel is (assuming you don't know): http://www.racheljoyscott.com/index.htm
    http://www.rachelschallenge.com

    I'd be glad to add you as my AP daughter Welcome to the family I hope to get to know you better.

    <3 Zach