Whales and dolphins fell from a sky that could't hold the rain
but put your broken heart in my hands, and I'll stand the pain
bumble bee's have never stung a flower, because they're best friends
allow me to remove cupids wicked arrows, and you'll never hurt again
if tomorrow you awaken and your heart's still black, I'll give it back
A contest entry
- Less words, more action! by Overcast.
610 points, ended January 6, 2009, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i luv it
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WOW! What a great read this one is! I really enjoy this one... This is a lot deeper than the words! Great job!
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I like this! It's kind of like the one I recently wrote. The same kind of style I mean. I liked the way you ended it. It kept it from being too mushy.
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Interesting. It seems almost sad though, removing cupid's arrow prick. Removing love? Or removing the pain of love lost?
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Very nice!
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This made me tear up
it was so beautiful. You have such tender words.. best of luck in the contest dear.
Angel
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A very sincere and heartfelt write, I wish you the best in this contest!!!
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