Words stranded in air.
Invisible cobwebs,
speechless, my heart drops.
Death was not my intention
Tears. . .
A contest entry
- Less words, more action! by Overcast.
610 points, ended January 6, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What is one thing that stood out in this poem?
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I really like the first two lines but.. not a big fan of the ending.
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well less words, more action I felt that I showed extreme action in this piece. Thanks for the contest best wishes in judging this contest...
thanks for the comment.
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You're welcome!
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Very dark but the poem moves in a sense
edpressing a very intense pain. Very good!
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A very touching writ. I loved the imagery and aliteration, as well as the emotional environment. It is a sad and disheartening thing to have words that flow from ones heart, but when they reach the lips, they stall. We fear speaking raw emotion, thinking that its purity would leave us vulnerable.. or worse .. looking like a fool. Not knowing wheter or not that what we feel is mutual. This was a most enjoyable and meaningful read, and I wish you the best in the comp
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this was really wonderful I love the imagery your words painted.. bravo! best of luck in the contest hun.
Angel
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thank you
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Great thought for this contest.
I love the imagery here.
Good luck!
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yours was much better! Thank you for the great comment!
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