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Celestial Embodiement

 

 

 


I wish I knew more about making love
because that’s all I want to do with you.
To be the star streaming across your eyes
exploding to ecstasy of showers.

I want to be the air inside your lungs
to know what is it to be within you.
Spread my wings and fly across  your valley
as I lay you on a bed of red roses.

I’ll never know every way to love you,
but in making love I promiose to be
a student and an ardent connoisseur
because to make love to you is to walk

in all mystical delights of heaven,
till every part of your soul touches me.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 




 

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  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    January 2

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    -sigh- Isn't it amazing to have someone like this or to see someone through those eyes, that can inspire works as great as this, that can inspire feelings and imagery such as this....

    Just between you and i, every prompt in the contest came from one person who does just that for me.

    Thanks for the entry, fantastic job


  • afroqban
    January 2
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    ok, now, if i wrote something like this, im sure to score! lol

    well done yet again.

  • Judith Chandler
    January 2

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    I like the way the lines flow, what d'ya call it -- embouchemont? You have captured that feeling of perfect unity between lovers.


  • butterflywriter
    January 2
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    incredible line...

    To be the star streaming across your eyes


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 1

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    I wish I had that in real life, I really do. This is beautifully carved out of thin air/and the prompt. But now all it makes me feel is inadequate because I cannot do this or that right.

    still, really lovely work!


  • fairytalelovestory
    January 1
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    this is so beautiful


  • insideinsanity
    January 1
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    Period, the end, I love this.

    It's so honest... [sigh] Luvluvluv

  • Aisades
    January 1

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    This is absolutely touching. I like the humble way you express your needs and hopes to your loved one. This isn't proclaiming but more, asking. Beautiful


  • Amera gold member
    January 1

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    "I wish I knew more about making love"

    Sounds to me like you already know how.



    Love,
    Amera♥

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