A virus that has changed the way we live
Too late for many victims of its curse
A little thought is not a lot to give
When carelessness can lead to so much worse
A fight to save so many every day
In Africa some nations torn apart
The heavy price some people have to pay
When following an impulse of the heart
We have to share the drugs with those in need
And give the best to those without the cash
You can't cure half the world with latent greed
Or save the rich and treat the poor as trash
Don't let the moral zealots have their way
Insist on helping someone else today
In a list
A contest entry
- International World AIDS Day 2008 by lordoftherings.
9000 points, ended January 24, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HIV/AIDS Stigma - The real killer? by Still Standing.
2100 points, ended February 3, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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Absoultly Great!
I love sonnets and this sonnet was perfect for the topic and was really straightforward with it's message allowing others to be able to read and understand easily without having to know about poetic devices, if it is a sonnet etc. Very well done. Thanks for entering and good luck! -
I've never seen a sonnet used as a "call for action. Pretty nifty idea. How about renaming it "Donate Your HIV Meds" and give a link to one of the sites where it can be done?
By scanning you sonnet, your iambic pentameter executed well and I did not experience any forced rhyme. (An experieced reader of poetry can tell when forced rhyme is used -- it jars them in their reading and slows them down).
Thank you for entering this contest.
Gregg
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thats really good!!
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You moralise like crazy and then say "Don't let the moral zealots have their way"! Well, that's always the best way to run an argument.
This is a straight-down-the-middle, moral, call-to-action. It fits the sonnet template robustly, and does EXACTLY what it says on the tin. You can't fault the message. Three bunnies.
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This is really a wonderful lesson for all humanity. Far too many people suffer from this desiease and your poem is wonderful.
Love,
Amera♥
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