Meaningless, useless, utterly ignored
Each try failing miserably
Longing to break free, to feel something
Always alone, isolated, never seen or cared for
Nothing seems to be able to help
Chaotic ideas of so called solutions run rampant
How else could it ever get easier
Only you know, deep down its not true
Left alone, suffering in complete anguish
Yearning, aching, feeling entirely worthless
Author notes
I'm not sure if this is exactly what you wanted if not just let me know and I can change it.
A contest entry
- bring me to the core of sadness, the backbone of melancholy by Ryno.
600 points, ended January 4, 2009, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Give me the truth.
Comments
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I love this! Beautiful job!
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This is what I was looking for, no worries. All I asked was that you poets would try your best to touch what you think sorrow is.
I liked your more simple take to the prompt, your idea to just define sadness.
My suggestion would be to work on your descriptions though. Some of the phrases seemed cliche for pieces about sadness. Really try to describe it creatively. And I also think that imagery would do wonders for this write.
I enjoyed this though, you have something here.
Thanks for the entry.
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