Slept on my mother
straight across America
To race motor bikes.
Told Strasbourg, "fuck off
I wont break it to fix it
I'll make a new one."
I was a poet
before a race car driver
The same kind of speed.
Silent with a smoke
I brought them all to their knees
to bid them, "get up".
Author notes
Written February 12th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest - Tell me about your favorite story. by verses on flesh.
400 points, ended February 21, 2006, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I thought this was a really well expressed and nicely written poem. Though I don't know much about James Dean or his movies, therefore as far as the contest I cannot really judge this piece because you have not given me any information to go on. Is this about the actor himself, or more likely about his characters?
As a poem free standing, this is a wonderful write. And I would not change a single word in it. There is a wonderful flow, and you have wonderful phrasing, my particular favorite is the third stanza for the comparison it gives.
I am disappointed it cannot be considered, because it is a very wonderfully written piece.
~jamie
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I was a poet
before a race car driver
The same kind of speed.
Fuck. This poem makes me curse out of sheer admiration. You're ridin with the best of them, same kind of speed. -
My biggest mistake in life was falling in love with James Dean in life...I ended up taking the fast lane. A little slow in the beginning but picked up speed as I went along. The metaphor of car speed and writing poetry is excellant. Sometimes there is a dire need to furiously get down on paper thoughts like when a race car driver is behind his wheel. great write. gregg
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This is a great biographical, yet personal opinion on James Dean. It was like how you saw him, and what he exuded to be. Great job. I'm highly interested in the Golden Age of Hollywood, and I'd say James Dean was a definite part of that. I loved the imagery you used here. It was subtle, but really added to the poem.
Silent with a smoke
I brought them all to their knees
to bid them, "get up".
Great way to end the poem, it really makes you think. Great write and good luck in my contest! -
Awww, James Dean. What a great inspiration indeed. I have to admit even though it was way before my time he was a dreamy one. The ultimate "bad boy." This flowed together so well. You made your point known and was well taken.
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Last stanza said more to me than anything else. A wake up call through poetry, at least that's how I read it. Came here for peace..came here for logic..for escape. Thanks for postin, some days it's the only place I find solace. Go figure, eh.
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i love this. its one of those that gets me.
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He is one of the greatest ones there has been in the motion picture cinema halls around the countries of the world for all time humankind has existed!Rock on!!
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excellent Job !!!
"He was too fast to live too young to die ~ by ~ by "..I was a kid when ((The Man)) within me died ..OMG "too cool for school"~love that Eagles song >>James Dean>> !! At last someone comes along and god only made one ..Hell everything he did was poety in motion ..Sorry big fan ,,Hey in my eyes a great Job ~ Thanks ~ Applause !!!! -
Don't drive to fast today, okay? lol
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Like being a bit East of Eden
Beautifully done. A collection, Haiku's for Fallen Stars. I am putting this right next to Patsy's. Bless you.
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great poen, but how is being a race car driver compared to poetry as speed, is it a rush for you the both of them, great comparison among the two
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The way this poem moves is just perfect,I know i'm always proud of your work...but how can't I be. I really loved this as usual but there was this diffferent quallity then most of your work..one day i wish i could write like this...one day.
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