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as her lyrics touched me


she is music
to my song;

a staccato sample
that recites vocals
in virtuoso strong

she conducts dynamics
in chords
of ballads, and bass

building upon the bridge
of rhythm's melody

then her aria
an interlude
in a capella

like the nocturne crescendo
that transitions ballet


and with gentle grace
she plays me,
in soft strings

of love's lyrical expose...



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  • stef-witt gold member
    October 16

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    This is fantastic... As I read through, I got a really amazing image in my head... like I could see "her" sitting on a stage in a spotlight, directing music and words to a solitary audience memeber... Incredible write - well done!!


  • individuality gold member
    October 11

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    we are all doodles and shapes, spiralling along our mental ways. she rulkes. and we crash against the borders of breath, waiting for a response in this mad life we live. hahaha.


  • myrataal silver member
    September 27

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    Beautiful work.

    your poetry in itself is so lyrical ... the beautiful merge with the muse is a bonus.


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    August 11

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    Wow, are you a musician or a trained person in music? you speak so much like my choir leader, and i liked the reference to staccato, it instantly took me to thinking of him lolol! a very great piece indeed!

    Love and light
    Lencio


  • heaven all alone
    August 8
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    i like it. reads very smoothly


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 16

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    Aww this was very beautiful & soft.
    Many graceful images, and subtly sensual.

    A most wonderful write & treasure to read.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Lady Michaella
    February 20

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    ooo! this is beautiful!!!! lovely use of musical terms.... i congradulate you on this fanastic poem

    Thanks for entering my contest,
    and best of luck!

    Your judge,
    -Lemon Bee-


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 30

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    Magnificent Write!

    You must be a pianist, or musician...with this write....My this is outstanding, in flow, just gorgeous...A musician myself! Bookmarked! write


  • RedAquarius
    January 27

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    I was deluged by love poems and they began to blur together in bland form - this stands out. I really enjoy the simplicity and the use of musical terms to help underline the mood here. Lovely.

  • tara wilson gold member
    January 25
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    this is really beautiful..


  • TankA
    January 18
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    Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, nice to dream inside this poetry.


  • azlyn gold member
    January 14

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    Simply lovely! Enchanting words so fair!





    sigh.....


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 9

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    Wow ...

    I don't think I have the words, nor anything purposeful to say that could define the beauty displayed here. Gorgeous!!!


  • Daisy Ballerina
    January 6
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    awwwww...
    Lovely!!


  • insideinsanity
    January 1

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    Stunning.

    I find the last four lines interesting; that the opposite of the usual 'he played me like a ...' was used --

    'she plays me,
    in soft strings

    of loves lyrical expose...'

    Just a very splendid piece.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    January 1

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    a very beautiful write! something that had a soft touch to it, and really reached out to the reader and brought out a tender side.. There was such love and moving emotions in this wonderful write.. You truly showed us, love.. Thank you very much for sharing!


    Kat


  • LaVieSansCouleur
    January 1
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    Beautiful

    This was beautifully written, i however, was letdown when it ended. True talent.


  • Angelflower
    January 1

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    This was so soft and loving.. I didn't want to stop reading this! Very lyrical and moving, thank you very much for sharing something so beautiful.

    Angel


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 1
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    this is sooo beautiful!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 1

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    Gentle lovesong, painted in simple words and delicious imagery.

    Lovely stuff



    Jeff


  • starrynight3636
    January 1
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    A beautiful tribute to the one you love! Well expressed.


  • JustsimplyKatiee.
    January 1

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    This piece is really really cute! You are such a great poetet. I mean your work is amazing. So full of emotions! Can't wait to read more! Keep it up. [:


    "....a staccato sample
    that recites vocals
    in virtuoso strong...."

    Really beautiful!

    x[[♥]]x
    and ♥
    Katiee.


  • Desire gold member
    January 1

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    Wowzers!!

    Oh My Word now this is a symphony of Beauty my Friend
    Loves the images also the words weaved
    then her aria
    an interlude
    in a capella
    I Love Yanni and song: Aria-
    This reminded me of that moment of smiles
    Excellent this is~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~

  • Sweetest-Maleficia
    January 1
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    woah this is sick you are quite the romantic arentcha haha


  • xSierraaaSays
    January 1

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    Oh em gee! This piece is adorable! I absolutely love it. One of the best pieces I've read in a while! Great work!

    "...and with gentle grace
    she plays me,
    in soft strings..."
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    My absolute Favorite part!


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    January 1

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    truely a poem for her to cherish, beautifully written and inspirational as well, thank you for sharing and best wishes.
    S

  • Aisades
    January 1
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    Very concisely and eloquently written.


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 1
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    Wonderful job! Great flow

    ♥ Kathraina


  • Xx-Yolanda-xX
    January 1

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    "and with gentle grace
    she plays me,.."
    beautifully written.
    expressing your feelings using
    musical lyrics.....just love it.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    January 1

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    "like the nocturne crescendo
    that transitions ballet"


    I like


  • rbruce gold member
    January 1
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    Beautiful write my friend, just beautiful.


  • aboomer silver member
    January 1

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    How beautiful! I love how you've shown the connection between the lyrics and the song itself - how one is not complete without the other.
    Just lovely!!


  • PastelMoons gold member
    January 1

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    This is so eloquent
    so very graceful ,
    As a musician I can truly appreciate
    your word choices and the imagery
    is just magical!
    Enchated
    ~Pastel


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    January 1

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    This is so beautiful!

    some times when i read your writes and poems you leave me awed! today is no different , I love waking up to such a lovely written poem,
    Thank you so much for sharing

    Blessings and love

    Rend


  • AmazinJason
    January 1

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    I've fallen for a girl's lyrics,
    the way her 'gentle grace' plays my heartstrings
    it's something like love...
    and I seem to have trouble expressing myself.
    So this is awesome in the way it says what I can't.
    So many musical terms pulled together, nice work!

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