Crimsion screams
Drape my figure
I constantly add to my little notes
How could i do this
I think
What about all the progress
I screem to myself
A horce demonic whisper
Popps into my ear
Reminding me
Of the uncontrolable urge
To cause myself pain
I was once "normal"
Before the deperession sunk in
But the pent up emoution
Was driving me insane
The blade
The shank
The bayonet
And the razor are all my closest friends
And also my most fesred enimies
They are the ones
Who comfert me in lonleyness
Who hug my skin tight
Leaving scarlett gifts
Upon my wrists
But be they the ones
Who will cause my untimley death?
For, that is the question,
Which keeps the craving at bay
This one haunts my every dream... tell me what you think, i need feed back
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oops forgot to rate lol
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cool
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Wow.
That is so beautiful. I can realate completely.
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wow! I really enjoyed this I loved the description is was a very fluent poem.
I'm going through what you have written here and it is indeed a very hard processes to go through.
My favorite lines where 'They are the ones
Who comfert me in lonleyness
Who hug my skin tight
Leaving scarlett gifts
Upon my wrists'
I loved this verse I found it really powerful!
Keep up the brilliant work,take care xxx
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this was an interesting piece. i like how each stanza has powerful imagery and your final stanza had a powerful message. it seems like your last stanza was holding your entire poem together. aweseom write. keep penning
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Im confused as to why you asked me to read it and i mean yes spelling mistakes but you already said that yourself. there is a spell checker when adding poems. It is a very strong write. I really like the impact of the last stanza. Its by far the best one in the poem.
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This is one strong poem, filled with a clear image of the cries from within. One that shows a deeper understanding of why, but also one of knowing that with a will power to survive, and beat the demon, is a saving grace.
keep up the strength to fight it, keep thinking positive, and keep writing. Anything that assists you in getting through this is always worth the effort, Well done.
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