Falling fast
And I don't care
A dying man
My trembling hands
The heart will die
Before the brain
And all this pain
And all this hope
For nothing at all
A fading memory
A crumbling life
An end of all
Of me
Of you
Nothing new
I'm falling faster
I don't care
A dying man
My trembling hands
Please tell me what you think
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HOOKWINK
There is great rhythm in this poem. The quickness of something precious dying is so sad. It can happen in the twinkling of an eye. Excellent write!
- joanne -
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Hoodwinked!
This is very well-written, full of very vivid emotion I recognize.
Rarely, I might add. You have a lot of talent, so keep on writing!
Luv in Christ, BonnieQ 
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Hoodwinked
You been hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits. I thought your poems could use some commenting. Keep up the great writes. -
Hoodwinked!
What a sad piece... it is as though you hold fate in your hands and are not quite sure where it will lead
Shari
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Hood Wink!
Painfully penned;
This is beautifully sad, there is deep tragedy yet a compelling strength of beauty - I know that sounds odd but it is true ... from me anyway
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Hoodwinked!
I feel the pain expressed in this poem.
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deep mate , very deep, I can say honestly I know how you were feeling when you wrote this and you've poured out your emotions.I can feel your pain.
Remember I Loves Ya
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Very interesting piece of emotions of old age. Best of luck to you on your future writes and thank you for sharng your poetry.
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