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Sing My Story

Start the music
Cue the band
Here I sit
A lonely man
Set the mood
Dim the lights
Play the sad song
Of my life
Tell the story
Note for note
How I fell
How I broke
Anxiously
I wait for when
I will know
How this song ends

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  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    January 15

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    HOODWINKED !!!

    This thoughtful poem has good meter, I like the use of these small thought bytes given in a staccato rythym. Very effective!

    You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!

    Dennis


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    January 15

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    Hoodwinked!

    What a piece full of sorrow.
    You have shown loss, and painted a picture of melancholy.

    Shari-Lei


  • Lady Altheia
    January 2

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    Another sad song, hope eerything turns out all right. Keep wrting and best of luck to you on your future writes.