There once was a girl
everyone thought she
was perfect as can be.
She was so pretty.
Only that one smile kept
her off her knees.
In the inside told a
different story.
The inside she was truly
bleeding. Something that
she truly wished not to be.
She tried not to hurt anyone.
She was too afraid to tell.
Everyone won't understand,
she just wanted to run,
but she was too afraid.
She wanted to leave her
own hell land.
She was truly lost in reality
she was cursed by her own
story, that never ends.
Trying hard to break free,
she is still stuck in reality.
She was truly bleeding.
That one story she cant
help believing.
Author notes
felt like writing....
A contest entry
- the emo's suisidal's and/or pyros by xXemo-teddybearXx.
400 points, ended January 15, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark and/or Love poetry contest, posted from Korea! (ROK) by Akarian.
950 points, ended January 20, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ahd..the story is very much curious and very much touching as well..love the way it is narrated through the poetic image..well done...
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Innoncence on the outside, but a dark through kept on the inside, I like it.
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well this was really good and it had good emotion into it
really good write
thankyou for entering my contest
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thank you........
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sounds like me when i'm angry... very nice, i love it!
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haha yeah thats me lol Thank you
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Exactly what everyone is saying, your sadness hums through the words and vibrates to our core. Truly a sorrowful poem and at the same time such a great one. Keep up the writing and we'll secretly bleed inside with you. <3
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thank you very much yeah and that is true=]]]
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You're welcome very much! =D
~ToxicSuicide.
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wonderful poem! you can feel the pain and sadness with every line. This describes the life so many ppl live, and it touches ppl to the core
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Thank you very much
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There is alot of pain hidden behind your words. It saddens me to guess the life that has brought this out.
Great job.
Mike
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Thank you very much.....
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So touching and heartfelt here, just so true and painful, how some girls out there always bleeds inside and no one even notices it...
I hope you feel better soon...
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Thaks that helps =]
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its really good because some of us can relate
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oh thank you haha i just wrote in your guest book before i even got this haha srry
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