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Ruminates of Ruminations

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Ruminates of Ruminations

The mirror has always done that to me
Over and over and over again
It can be still if I want it to be
The mirror has always done that to me
My soul is aware, it cannot be free
For if I dare move, it drives me insane
The mirror has always done that to me
Over and over and over again

The mirror has always done that to me
Over and over and over again
It pretends to be an accessory
The mirror has always done that to me
It captures my mind, discarding the key
‘Till I am confined and locked in its chain
The mirror has always done that to me
Over and over and over again

The mirror has always done that to me
Over and over and over again
And the glass could care less, if I agree
The mirror has always done that to me
For its essence reflects my jealousy
Over and over reflecting the pain
The mirror has always done that to me
Over and over and over again

 

 

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Author notes

Rumination is my word prompt
verb (used without object)
1. to chew the cud, as a ruminant.
2. to meditate or muse; ponder.
–verb (used with object)
3. to chew again or over and over.
4. to meditate on; ponder.

Triolet:
A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

Art Work by: cherublupus@deviantart

I know, I rhymed the word "again" like an Englishman.

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 7

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    No one can do Forms with repetitive lines better than you Sis. Love this!!

    (That's the way we pronounce "again" too )


  • Melodies
    January 6

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    Well said and truly profound, for the mirror does a clever job of presenting constant reality. At some point one begins to look like her grandparent used to look, and that is rather like magic because it cannot be true, right? lol Fine writing, good Amera!


  • Rovingone gold member
    January 4

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    How true. Mirrors have such a power to do all those things. To show us things, cold and uncaring, to make us witness what we do not want and with a personality of their own, an inanimate object that can crush anyone with no words.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    January 3

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    You never cease to leave me without the right descriptive word, this is outstanding hun, I love your form poetry! Best to you in the contest


  • Desire gold member
    January 2

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    Wow~

    Oh My Word-
    This is one Excellent form- and You penned this with ease- the images grabbed me within each line-I was anticipating the next
    Bravo~
    Keep that quill dancing Beautiful~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • pain in colorado
    January 2
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    Wow, such a poem. It sticks to your soul


  • pain in colorado
    January 2
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    You are awesome.


  • Keith Drew gold member
    January 1
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    I can't stop reading this poem!
    Over,and over, and over again.


  • Topaze
    January 1

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    Very nice the repetition works well here and does enhance it with a lyrical flow. Very well done, my best wishes.


    • Amera gold member
      January 1
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      Aww… Thanks! “Lyrical flow” What a wonderful complement from someone who carries a guitar all day. Hehe….


  • Lexie - gold member
    January 1

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    I LOVE!!!

    The repitition! you chose the perfect form and really put thought and feeling into what you brought back,
    this is just amazing, i'm truly in awe.
    well done Amera and good luck


  • Haygood gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    I am learning...

    that the form has alot to do with the presentation of a poem. The form you use can add to the dept of the poem. You have chosen the best form for this poem. Bravo!!!

    • Amera gold member
      January 1
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      Thank you so much for the comment and the applause. You’re absolutely right! I write a free verse outline of a poem then I decide what form will best complement it. The challenge I was given was a word that had two meanings; “over and over” and “meditation”. I chose the Triolet because of the repetition and I added the thought as the message. Yes, you are learning and quickly too.


  • Swan song gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    A tremendous entry. Trolets are no easy task let alone three of them, but I think you pulled it off with style


  • StarEyes
    December 31, 2008

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    Yet another wonderful read from the "Form Queen" of AP! This is beyond words sis! WOW! you make them look sooooooo easy, and I sit here like Great job!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    the flow

    the rhyme, oh how it chimes!! yea, love this wonder, and somewhat dark and intrinsically deep piece of poetic beauty!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    You have clearly ruminated on rumination, Your verse is in itself strongly ruminative.
    To ruminate further, I'd say you have chewed it over as many times as is possible and come up with a delicious poetical description
    great stuff

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