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here with me

When you leave in the morning
take me with you,
and when the sun hasn’t shone,
for days on end,
show me your smile.
For if all I have to see,
before I close my eyes at night,
is the sight of your silhouette,
I’ll be content in knowing,
you’re here next to me.

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thinking about my love

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  • bigperm gold member
    January 22
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    what beautifully vivid imagery...

    solice in the comforting acceptance of the one whom you hold so dear. They are lucky to have you.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 9
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    Awesome write

    This is truly a spectacular write and it speaks in volume

  • bob Greene
    January 7
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    Beautifully written and as commented below you finish it well.


  • Joseph Hollis
    January 6

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    Beautifully written and heartfelt. This speaks volumes for having so few words.

    Well done. I enjoyed every bit of this.


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    January 1

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    I’ll be content in knowing,
    you’re here next to me.

    You are fantastic at ending poems, i think i like this one more than the last one i commented on, another very beautiful write =)
    Laura

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