Once upon a time, in an old abandoned wood
In a little grassy clearing, a lonely figure stood
A silhouetted body, a dim and darkish shape
A thin and lanky stature in a long and ragged cape
His breath arrived asthmatic as he, o’er his shoulder, looked back
At the lightly smoking rubble that was once an old straw shack
Among the ruined wreckage lay the quarry of his hunt
He sniggered at his triumph and wheezed a quiet grunt
“One down…two to go”
A scene much like the one before, though now an open meadow
Met with the similar silhouette, the dark and shrouded shadow
He’d been walking long and hard and he grew tired fast
But his hunt had brought him here and carry on he must
The cabin had resistance and the wood was hard to fall
Much more so than the straw before the large marauding squall
But soon the hunted lay unmoving ‘neath the fallen lumber
And panting hard in raspy tones said the shadowed hunter
“Two down…one more”
The third the same like both those in the forest and the field
But now, layered blocks lined up and down no being should they yield
The cloak swept fast up to the door and made a swiftly rap
And from behind a frightened voice denying him to pass
But there was no quitting, not with one kill left to make
And there was mighty power in the breath he made to take…
…but…Alas!
There was no devastating wind, aggressive wheezing came instead
The violent coughing overwhelmed and he was fallen over dead
The prey lived on to tell the tale and what the morals show
Ignorance had made his disregarded downside grow
And in the slightly irony, death did its prey engulf
And this is how the simplest sort killed the killer wolf
Author notes
This thing is in the classic traditional "A,A,B,B" rhyming fashion.
T h e M o l t
A contest entry
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Comments
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Wow Great rhymes in this one and a very sweet story
The flow to this is perfect Thank you so much for entering my contest and
Good luck!
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Fabuylously written -
What a story you told, it almost made me breathless from holding my breath in anticipation of the ending, which, by the way, I didn't see coming!
Great job - thank you for sharing it with us, it's been a while since I read this style
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awww this is really cute
this is the style that i am most accustomed to writting myself
but anyways this is really nicely written and it kept my attention since im a sucker for fairytales
well done and good luck!
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What a warped take!
on this classic fairy tale. A very consistent flow of thought to this rhyme. I had a happy smile from reading this. Thanks for the entry.
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