Insignificant, we mortal beings, a simple puzzle piece
to survive we need water, food and sun
we are merely stitches in an ever-knitting fleece
that can so easily be undone
no different from the monkeys in the trees
no different from the daisies in daily struggle
no different from the shrimp in the salty seas
only less humane in our barbaric juggle
By stripping our mother nature from her hearty green
and killing each other and other species
free-falling downwards, backwards, and not unseen
for many have noticed and advertise their theses
no different from the monkeys in the trees
no different from the daisies in daily struggle
no different from the shrimp in the salty seas
only less humane in our barbaric juggle
And those thieving poets of mechanical prose
pumping out indecipherable gibberish to innate robots
who kneel before the Money-Gods in limos
and pump bullshit from media-needles into deep veins, leaving one subtle blood spot
Author notes
Take a deeper delve into your inner self, see with your own eyes the holes they have made from propaganda injections
A contest entry
- Mother Earth by Nymphetemine.
750 points, ended January 5, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
927 points, ended February 16, 1509 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive critism guys?
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a very deep read that highlights nicley things others often ignore to see i like the stanza that you repaet this adds more style to it, nice flow and a subtle rhyme form going on
well done xxx
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maybe insignificant, but your rhyms magnicent -lol
Hey tam, i'm just whizzing through ure poems now, again i'm astonished, Are you producing these poems in some battery farm factory in China or summert!? Well you can't be cos they are each so unique. I love the skills you express in this but I disagree with your sense. For example how can we be less humane than a shrimp or daisy, only humans can be inhuman or daisy cannot, I know what you mean though, its as if are barbarism is against our nature which is a damn good point! Also ure attack on the "uneducated" isn't quite what you mean I think, since most university graduates are still full of bullshit, don't you mean "... gibberish to robots who won't think for themselves" or some such thing? X
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I've changed the term 'undeducated' to 'innate'. How does that tickle your fancy?
And i don't think you've grasped that we (in a sense) are less humane than most animals and plants, because they have something we do not, care, love, and protection for their family, newborn, and those in their 'community' or pack or herd or what not. Are you with me?
Thanks for all your praise I know you love me
I'm making an AP family to put on my profile dear brother of mine, so you will be my Bristolian Blood Brother. If thats okay for you?
Tam x
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An excellent write. It is very deep and I had to read it a couple of times to see where you were going with the write. I am very impressed.
Good luck in the contest.
Yorkshire Bard. Blessings
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you have shown many things that people sometimes fail to see
its refreshing to see a poem which highlights these points
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This is a good write. I was with it the whole way through. Though I will admit I was a little astonished at the sudden curse word, but it added to the emotion. Bravo!
♥ Kathraina
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good job....
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this is so true! i really enjoyed this. i dont think i've ever thought of the human race in the way that.... well, we are all the same as any other living thing out here.
but we just hurt each other, and destroy the things that give us life daily.
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