i just found out what you've done 2 me
how could u do this,how could it be
i actually thought u weren't like most of the guys
but u played me out u told stories and lies
on second thought im not surprised
now i see where your priorities lie
so if u want her go ahead
because you killed my heart
killed it dead!-Your now Ex GF Chelsea
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A emotional write, that I am sure a few people can realte to. I think that if you use some capitalization and used the words "you and to" instead of "u and 2" it might help them stand out more. Thanks for sharing this with us, if you have any questions about the site please feel free to ask.
Sarah
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I think what you have written makes a powerful statement about how you feel from the situation. It gets your point across to the reader and clearly understood that you are hurting and probably a bit angry too.
But since you asked me to comment, I will say that this would look better if you actually spelled out the word you instead of just using 'u'.
Other that that, it really is a good short piece.
Welcome to AP. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to IM me.
Keep expressing through writing.
Storm
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