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He trapped my bedouin heart

With heavenly fingertips,

he separated the stars

from a mosque of midnight blue.

Bronze shadows glittered

on waves of coral sands

in the dusty desert sky.

He took my hand and guided me

to an oasis of serenity, where

carpets of tangled irises bloomed.

 

His life was a dedication,

made to nestle my dangling 

fears in the scorching heat.

 

Gazing into the flickering flames

of his poetic eyes,

muffled sighs filled the searing air.

Specks of sand, rose from the 

ground in a swirling motion

as his fingers slipped through mine.

He disappeared beyond the

vanishing point, while a sand-storm

danced in melancholic plumes.

 

His life was a dedication,

made to submerge me in an

eternal mirage of thirsty sands.

 


 

 

 

 


 

 

 

 

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  • divebar
    May 19
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    very sandy. lol. i like the sentiment, but watch the repetition.

  • i really love the italic parts,
    they're just so.. beautiful, especially the last stanza.
    your imagery never ceases to amaze me.
    another excellent write, oh and i really love the title of this, it really caught my attention.

    ElectricBloom

  • This is gorgeous, love, and I'm so glad that I stumbled across it. Stunning imagery here... Well done & congrats on being in the finalists' list in Kevin's contest... Who knows, we may be published yet


  • trekkergirl
    March 3

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    wow you have some wonderful imagery and emotions in this write. Just beautiful.. great write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering this into this contest.

  • This is just beautiful m'dear!!! The imagery is crisp and filled with so much 'heart', allowing room for emotion to surge throughout. Serene and true to the feeling within. nicely done! Thank you for your entry!


  • Overcast
    January 30
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    One of your best, I think.


  • landmark
    January 13
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    really beautiful imagery... the lines in italics are fantastic.


  • Rhythm Child
    January 12

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    With heavenly fingertips,

    he separated the stars

    from a mosque of midnight blue.

    Bronze shadows glittered

    on waves of coral sands

    in the dusty desert sky.

    He took my hand and guided me

    to an oasis of serenity, where

    carpets of tangled irises bloomed




    pure beauty, i loved the way you worded this, it flowed so intricately and the imagery was absolutely amazing
    these lines were simply brilliant


  • penman gold member
    January 11
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    Wonderful

    Very touching and so well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    you can do it, I have faith in you.. and for the record your poetry is amazing, so you're not in over your head.. I am..


    good luck
    mommy


  • Hikari Lady
    December 31, 2008
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    Do poke me when you're done, lady.

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