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There's this girl in the mirror, I wonder who she is. Sometimes I think I know her and sometimes I wish I did.  There is a story in her eyes, lullabies, and goodbye.  When she's looking back at me I can tell...she's hurting inside.

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  • Afxb
    December 31, 2008

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    This is sweet.
    Looking in a mirror reminds us of our past (stories) and usually of sadness
    There are some subtle rhymes and half rhymes in here.
    I think you could experiment with the layout of the words.