I see the star of Jesus’ light,
of years ago, Holy night -
I bring a new star,
shining bright.
– a welcome Jesus star
– a modern avatar.
Glory to you Lord.
Dominus Vobiscum.
in Aussie hearts forever be,
in all the paintings that we see,
shine all the world fair dinkum able,
to show sweet kangas kiss your kradle.
Author notes
Painting by poet.
A contest entry
- #149 Winklings: Write a poem about a Christmas painting. For AP. by Lyndon.
1750 points, ended January 9, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Poem and painting outstanding! The first three stanza were perfect and the turn brought in your country and home and wrapped the entire package as a Christmas present to everyone who reads it!
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I really like this poem, the nice rhyming structure and superb lexical choices make it flow so nicely an make it so much more enjoyable to read.
'sweet kangas kiss your kradle'
magnificent line - true patriotism and love of jesus blended together to tie up a magnificent write
Very nice piece,
Michael
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A fair dinkum poem of sincerity.
Dominus Vobiscum ... and with you, Christian friend.
Dear poet, this poem has the virtue of being highly original yet being central to the Christian message of Christmas. You paint well in words your poem to the painting from your own brush.
There is that that is endearing in the final lines and I do accept poetic licence in the spelling of "cradle".
Best wishes! Ron. 
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Thank you, Ron.
Thank you for the comments on 'Jesus LIght'. Yes, it is unusual in form...and it is unique because it is completely mine, both poem and painting. I wanted to show that the Aussie heart beats for Jesus.
The word KRADLE implies that there is something different in this cradle...something not in the ordinary, and K is the first letter of 'KING.'
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I enjoyed both your artwork and wordwork! What a lovely thought, "sweet kangas kiss your cradle!" The "welcome Jesus star" seems one each may post in their hearts. Did it not double as a seeking Jesus star? Loved the vocabulary "fair dinkum able".
Beautiful sentiments, well rhymed, very well metered. I enjoyed this.
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This is really cool..
I like how you went off your own painting, it kind of makes the whole thing come together. i like how you formatted it. This is very well written and short and straight to the point. i really like it the last 2 couplets. it just brings the whole poem together. well written.
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This is a very unusual poem with its unique cultural perspective and inspired by your own painting. I especially like the final couplet - it's very endearing.
All the best to you in the new year.
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