Willy was just a small garden snail
Beginning his journey in life
He had no idea bout the dangers out there
Nor the things that would bring him strife
He was born under a forget me not flower
When spring was just starting to bloom
The birds and the bees were raising their young
And the air smelt of sweet perfume
Willy came out on a day that was cold
The ground was all wet from the rain
And he followed the group wherever they went
And they went where the veggies were layin'
He didn’t know the dangers this posed
As he slithered across the damp ground
He just knew that he was to follow and go
Where the food source was to be found
Poor willy the snail was too young to die
But he went where no snail should go
Defence of our crops is utmost to us
There’s no giving where our veggies grow
Willy was born at an unlucky time
Now he sleeps in the realms of the dead
There’s a sign in that garden to warn all the snails
No trespasses here will be fed
Yes I remember poor willy but what could I do
The bugger should have just read the sign
He might have been born under a forget me not flower
But that veggie patch was bloody mine
In a list
A contest entry
- Make this THE largest Contest EVER on AP [enter, enter, enter!] by Symphony.
18000 points, ended April 28, 2009, 981 entries
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Comments
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Very amusing poem
As a keen gardener I fully understand
Of all the pesky garden pests I think I hate the snails the best.
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Thanks Pattiboo. If you want to know the truth though, I wouldn't hurt a fly if I can move them to a safe spot away from our vegies.
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LMAO!
There's been too few poems in here to make me laugh so far, but this really cracked me up, was giggling away to myself while reading it
How on earth did you come up with this, both the storyline and the poem itself? Absolutely hilarious, I wish I could get some of your creative inspiration xD
Thanks for entering
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Thanks, mate for your comments. I read a poem of Legends about Willy the worm and this came to mind. He'll make you laugh...He's a genious!
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hey I picked 3 laughs not 2 hehehehe
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hahaha in fits love this. Just when you need a laugh or two along comes condor with willy the snail
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Thank you for your comments. They are much appreciated. Going to have lunch so will catch you a little later.
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awww poor willy...you have a gift to paint a visual in the mind of a reader, I love that! This drew the reader in and what a twist to the end...excellent ~Marla~
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Thank you, mate. Glad you liked this one. Thanks for the read.
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Ha....a sad end to poor Willy...But knowing how snails are such a provokation to flowerbeds, lawns, etc..I can see why you had to have to take control...Such a delightful write of rhyme, and humor...
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Thanks, sweetie. I couldn't actually bring myself to hurt any creature deliberately. Normally, I will move them to a part of the block where they can do no damage to my garden. I have a lot of plants away from it and that is where they end up living! I'm just weird!!!!!lol!!!!!!!!!!
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LOL. This is a really cute story but sad at the end. I think you did a great job on this. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks mate. I really hated writing this actually. I couldn't hurt anything. If there is a snail in my garden, I move it away somewhere else. I go on a guilt trip otherwise.
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I love it! Very well written and a joy to read. Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks, mate. Your comments are very much appreciated.
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i like it
poor little willy.
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Yeah....Poor willy. Thanks.
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love the snail with the chimmney
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A wonderful little story told in your inimitable way.I do though have the feeling that it may be lost among so many entries Which would be a shame. A most enjoyable read Keep the ink running and good luck in the contest
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Hi, and thanks for your great comments. I will definately go in and change those pieces you mentioned as looking at it, I believe you are quite right. I entered this contest as a way of helping this lady get the most entries in one contest. I thought it was a clever ploy and Just found this little one. I hope she does make the record...that would be something.
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your talent is showing again, dear poet. A neat poem, well written, and telling a practical story. great work.
Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks, Bob. She wants to make this a contest with the most entries so i thought i would pop one in to help her make that come true.
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Superb Plus
A fine write, indeed. I also see it as a parable which also describes how our society often seems to treat the homeless, and others who are less fortunate than the rich.
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Thanks, mate. I loved your comments and glad you could see that parable. Most of my stuff has some underlining moral or such hidden but not always seen. Your comments are so much appreciated.
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