What was the beginning?
I thought
Searching for answers
In not my reflection I see
Face down in chunky stomach acid
It no longer belongs to me
Ignorantly, I gave it up
Was it the first whiff taken?
Bringing a burning sensation to my nostrils
Rousing the red eyed fiend
Did it always exist within?
Coiled in a cave at the depths of my consciousness
Silent serpent
Patient, prepared to strike
Waiting for the right moment to
Lash out
Toxic ivory
Perchance the ivory powder produced it
The beast that returns my stare
When I gaze at the morning mirror
Glazed eyes and Sinister smirks cast my way
Lifeless orbs, a toothless grin, and a soul fading grey
Frightful, really
I'm just surprised one could be so blind
To such a cancer
Cutting their soul
Mad
Hungry
A stealthy (Organized?)
Take-over
Coveting my crumbs
Tired of this tug of war
Searching for answers
I'll drift away
In not my reflection I see
Face down in chunky stomach acid
Because it no longer belongs to me...
Author notes
He lost himself to the drugs, they took over his shell, possessed him.
Ivory was first describing the venomous fangs of a rattle snake.
The second mention was the ivory shade of methamphetamine.
"Total loss of all basic motor skills
Blurred vision, no balance, numb tongue
The mind recoils in horror,
Unable to communicate with the spinal column
Which is interesting because you can actually watch
yourself behaving in this terrible way."
Option ( A ) Picture Inspired
Number ( 10 )
http://jpattison.deviantart.com/art/Addiction-99880915
A contest entry
- Hullabalooza of a Contest! by Manda-Lou.
1680 points, ended December 31, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Meth was my heaven and hell
Now I'm well. Another very good poem CS
Wishes -Emmjay
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Thanks for taking the time to read. I never personally tried it but one of my cousins used to do it... Congrats on comming clean.
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i must ask you again to left align this.
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Sorry. Haven't been on much.
It is left alligned. :S
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can you please left align this write as i am now requiring it for this contest. it makes it much easier to read. please and thank you very much. viyanna
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don 't forget to follow the rules and add your author name in the author notes and to email this to me at viyannas chance@yahoo.com. thank you so very much for this wonderful entry. viyanna rosemarie
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Great job on this piece. It reminded me of that book "Crank." Great write, really deep and has great flow. Good luck in the contest, you have a good chance of winning
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Actually. I'm a fan of Ellen Hopkins. Crank was a favorite of mine.
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It was a very touching book, unfortunately I haven't read the others. And your welcome, my pleasure
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Ah. In my opinion it was her best. Identical was pretty good too, however, it was hard to get into.
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Hmm, thats what my friends have said about the second one too.
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You mean, Glass?
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I think its the tragedy, the rawness, of what she writes that is appealing though.
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I found she really gets into the character's head. Especially in Crank. Which is why I loved the book so much. And I could really relate to the main character. It wasn't as if she was preaching, just telling the story how it is. Then again, could it be an addiction to tragedy?
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yea i was really surprised by it. i thought she was writing from personal experience, but it was actually her daughter that it happened to. She captured every moment and feeling so well. and the abstract way it was written added to it.
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wow
i love it
very nice
and the syntax
was done
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Thank you. :]
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Really well written. I like your visual effects it really works. Good luck!
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Thanks for the honorable. :]
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