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Closer

Waiting with
held breath.
Holding on
with outstreached
arms...
Hold me
I need to be close to you,
hold me,
closer.
I need you...
closer...
I want you...
closer...
because I love you.

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Ah. I dunno it's okay...

What do you think? Anything I can work on?

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  • Tripp-Radio
    January 1, 2009

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    Madi Herre...

    I think you could add more to this cause this is a great start. Describe your love and in what way you need them to be closer to you. Describe emotionally and physically your need.

    Even leaving this as it is, it's a short emotional write. You can say more or you can leave it as is and know to yourself the understanding is in the actions of yourself and the mind of whose reading.

    This poem could be a challenge to the mind, or even better, a reach to another's heart.


    Well done.